Words Over Easy

[stinky_horowitz]

Kakashi watched Iruka make breakfast for the two of them and wondered what it was all about. Occasionally, Iruka would peek over from beneath his hair, and smile to himself as he scrambled the eggs. They hadn’t had breakfast together in some time. Kakashi would have thought Iruka about to kick him out, but he seemed so happy. He even smelled like

Comments

[kiterie]

That made me laugh so hard I damn near choked... and on nothing! *giggles all over again*

[stinky_horowitz]

Oh man, I'm so glad. By the time I got done posting this, I couldn't remember if it was funny or not. The rich text editor crapped out on me and the LJ support was unhelpful. I ended up fixing a bunch of code in the HTML editor, which took forever. But I'm glad I did; I found my REAL NAME in the code because I cut and pasted from MS Word, and it put in a bunch of extraneous tags. I deleted that right quick. Anyway, it worked eventually and I went to bed in disgust with LJ.

You thought it was funny! Yay!

[kiterie]

I /know/ how that feels. I'll spend so long on a piece for one reason or another (technical difficulties suck ass) and by the time it goes up I'm a nervous wreck wondering if it was worth posting.

[yes_rhade]

that was great. I love Iruka's laughing.

[stinky_horowitz]

Awesome! Glad you liked it.

[dawls85]

*swoons* n_n

Such a terrific ending! This was such a perfect continuation of the first drabble...I loved every sentence! I thoroughly enjoyed the inner workings of Kakashi's mind- your descriptions throughout did a great job likening him to a dog (the references to scent, the fact that Iruka grabbed him by the scruff of his neck...) and kept up the running metaphor (or is it safe to call it a 'conceit'...?).

The ending was so adorably sweet! Excellent job with this! <3 <3

(also, as a total aside, great job with the discussion on 'tropes' for Kita...your argument was very well presented. I couldn't have agreed more.)

[stinky_horowitz]

Aw, man. *blushes* You're gonna ruin me for real work; that comment is like heroin.

(thanks. I was worried that I came across as overly pompous, because I tend to get on my high horse and ride around when I feel like "my people" are threatened.)

[dawls85]

Muahaha! It's about time /I/ ruin someone else for work! >:)

*is so /not/ writing this comment at her desk, pretending to do real work...*

[kita_the_spaz]

And you did not come across as pompous! I needed that comment and the swift kick in the ass. I'm a basket-case when I'm sick if you can't tell!

[kita_the_spaz]

This was a wonderful continuation of the first drabble, and I'm so glad you decided to continue it. ~bows in worship of your writing skillz~

And yeah, I know... the authors note was a crack at the chick who was so hyped on cold meds and stress, she freaked out. I got it... ~goes to hide in a corner with her Nyquil~

[stinky_horowitz]

I'm pleased you liked it, but I don't know what you're bowing for. I still don't feel like a "real" writer. I mean, everything I've written? You've seen it--two drabbles and this thing, which barely qualifies as a chapter. Maybe.

And the author's note? What? I had to study for a while (think constipated Naruto face) to figure out what you meant, because that was SO NOT directed at you. No, it was more directed at a faceless whoever who might pick on me for being derivative. Because I figure, if they said something to YOU, then I better cover MY butt. And I know that parts of what I wrote came from other places, but I couldn't remember where, or if I was being paranoid. Like, I was sure I got the scent thing from Fallen Leaves, but Kakashi saying "That was mean, Iruka" in a little voice is from somewhere. I think. Maybe it was a different character elsewhere; I don't know. So no, not directed at you.

[kita_the_spaz]

You're a fine writer, if new at it. What you write is well thought-out and clever. Your characterizations are dead on and your descriptions are sharp and clear. I'm relatively new to this fandom and writing without a co-writer. (not counting demondreams, I used to write with my roommate under the guise of kita & subu-chan or lithium delusions)
~laughs at the constipated Naruto face~
I wouldn't worry about it. I think most of mine was paranoia and illness. And I'm hardly one of the major players in this fandom, just a noob. I don't think you have to worry, I just let my emotions get the better of me!

[daemoneko]

I really needed a break from reading long and boring and technical docs, and hopped on to the net to find...this. This was lovely - all the little details, the domestic scene you painted, all the things that tied into your first drabble - Kakashi's vulnerability and Iruka's understanding - and Kakashi's realisation that he's understood. Tender and perfect.

[stinky_horowitz]

I'm so happy it read well for you. Thanks!