Lost and Unfound [2/2]

[oigabuss]

Title: Lost and Unfound
Author: oigabuss
Pairings: Lu Han/Kai, Lu Han/Sehun
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Mystery, Suspense
Length: 11,000 words
Description: The bell chimed seven times at midnight.

Comments

[baeksicles]

Oh my goodness. I think that I can definitely say that you used suspense /fantastically/. I'm not exactly a fan of either of the pairings here, but your writing absolutely blew my mind. Luhan's psychological build-up throughout the story definitely got to me, and I can honestly say that I found myself rereading this a couple of times while I was bored in Canada (hurhur, whoops).

Definitely going into my favorites list! c:

[oigabuss]

Thanks so much, I wasn't sure how it was going to work out because it's my first attempt at something remotely resembling suspense and I stumbled through it like asdfghjkl and I'm dying for some criticism to get better at it so I'm glad it turned out quite ok!

...And this may seem weird to mention here but I really like your entry ;;;;;;

[baeksicles]

I wish I could help you by offering some constructive criticism, but in all honesty, I've never really delved into the suspense genre, so whatever tips I try to give you would most likely be horribly misinformed. ;A;

asdfghjkl; Thank you so much! I'm really happy that your entry placed second! It's absolutely amazing! Ukexing and I were actually skyping one another when we each read it, and oh my goodness, the goosebumps stayed long after the call ended. I'm sure that if you continue to experiment within the genre you'll get even better at writing it (which is incredibly hard for me to imagine, because this piece already feels like perfection).

[oigabuss]

YOU ARE MUCH TOO NICE. Ah, speaking of ukexing, her piece was ASDFGHJKL AND YOURS TOO AND HELP THE FEELS ARE COMING BACK TO ME

[yukichi_1004]

Wow...?
I have been blown away by this fic....
The ending. Oh my goodness.
It was him....
That's why chanyeol asked him if he had a brother.
;_;
And... I kinda feel a little bad for jongin. He must've known luhan had someone else, no? And he'd been trying really hard to communicate with him towards the end.
I imagine when he last knocked on the door, a thud then footsteps where heard was pretty much the end of him trying ?
Can you you even call yourself? Maybe that's why the caller ID never displayed the number? Aahhhhhh the guilt luhan must've felt. It completely ate him up and agghh.

Wonderful fic!!

[oigabuss]

Thank you!!! Yes yes the point was guilt and regret, all of which lead to everything that happened in the fic. Glad you liked it! :3

[mayaisthename]

i'm a bawling mess. :'(

[oigabuss]

But whyyy :'( *pats you*

[mayaisthename]

because you just broke my heart with this fic. this is all your fault (and luhan's). but please do write more. :)

[oigabuss]

Thank you for the encouragement!!!

[taffyn]

omg...?! i have no words

your writing style is magnificent and it is such a joy to read.
wow, this story is like a movie playing out; the imagery is stunning. i think you wrote the suspense brilliantly... seriously, it kept me on edge the entire time, haha.
i love these stories where mysterious pasts are slowly revealed (which you did so perfectly, making the flow of the story so addicting), and then everything just hits you like bam and whoaa, damn its so good.

this is definitely one of my favs. <3

[oigabuss]

Wow that's too nice of you! Funny that you say it's like a movie playing out because that's what I had in mind while writing it down - actual moving images. I'm glad that got conveyed! Also I was afraid that the story was a bit too draggy (and I still think so) but good to know that it's at least bearable for the readers.

Thanks so much for reading! :D

[cyan0gen]

my first (and probably last) comment but i couldn't resist.
this was fucking perfection.

[oigabuss]

I beg to differ on the point of perfection, but fuck, I'm flattered. Enough said.