I'm assuming this is the next part of Avoidance? It would fit really well into that story. Just to clarify for myself- you purposely made Eowyn older, right? I think I remember you mentioning her age before but I just wanted to make sure.
I like how you've updated Tolkien's words to fit with the feel of your story. And it made me laugh in the beginning that you were talking about horses and embroidery, because one of my upcoming chapters deals with something along those lines. This also made me laugh: Ioreth's kind but mobile mouth
For here: I will not speak for you, Madam because I cannot support your mission. You should probably put a comma after Madam.
also, here (Faramir has the clear sight of the high Numenoreans, which has not been seen full blown amongst us for many a century) the "full blown" doesn't really seem like a term they'd use. Maybe something more like "fully?" (And in the next paragraph, it's "frighten" instead of "frightened
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Thanks, SMOR. I really appreciate your finding little snits in my writing. Now I gotta remember to fix 'em. Horses and embroidary, huh? Is Eowyn enough of a modern woman in Medieval dress to be accomplished at both
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I like how you've updated Tolkien's words to fit with the feel of your story. And it made me laugh in the beginning that you were talking about horses and embroidery, because one of my upcoming chapters deals with something along those lines. This also made me laugh: Ioreth's kind but mobile mouth
For here: I will not speak for you, Madam because I cannot support your mission. You should probably put a comma after Madam.
also, here (Faramir has the clear sight of the high Numenoreans, which has not been seen full blown amongst us for many a century) the "full blown" doesn't really seem like a term they'd use. Maybe something more like "fully?" (And in the next paragraph, it's "frighten" instead of "frightened ( ... )
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