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Weekly challenge - Surpises

Jun 06, 2015 10:14

Steele Surprise

Maybe this is going to be an awful idea, Laura reflected as she zipped her Rabbit to the address that “Remington Steele” had given her. Several weeks back, when they had come to an agreement about his contract with the agency, she had asked if he needed help finding an apartment. The hotels in LA weren’t cheap, at least the type of ( Read more... )

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eaz35173 June 6 2015, 18:58:28 UTC

Love it! Great addition to to Tempered Steele - all very in character and easy to picture in my mind!

suzysteele June 6 2015, 22:17:31 UTC

That apartment is amazing, masculine and attractive. It says a great deal about the character. That was my lead-off for the story.

There's still a story to be had about Steele meeting with his decorator.

eaz35173 June 6 2015, 23:46:36 UTC

It's funny, I've always envisioned Laura as the one to find and furnish that apartment (maybe not decorate it with the movie posters). I guess the way she functions in a masculine world and her somewhat masculine sense of fashion made me think that she would have found the apartment. But I like your story behind it, too.

Your version would explain why, in License, Steele (who presumably lives in LA) would need to rent a hotel room to "make his presence felt".

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laura_lee_63 June 7 2015, 02:00:14 UTC

It's wonderful!
I had assumed the same as Elise but I too like the way you tell it.
So many perfect lines it's hard to single any out.

'So here I am. Driving to his apartment so that we can identify a murderer using a plot from an old black and white movie that I haven’t even seen. This isn’t exactly how we learned to do it at Havenhurst.'
:D
I love it!

'"All right? It’s amazing!” If she had been looking at him, instead of at the furnishings, she would have seen him preen with pleasure.'
Perfect and so easy to imagine and picture.

I like the way it didn't occur to her that he'd cooked and so in keeping as that little surprise wasn't revealed until later in 'A Good Night's Steele', (I think) :)

Brilliantly written. :)

suzysteele June 7 2015, 02:08:53 UTC

Thanks, Lee. I'm having such a jolly time writing all this stuff. Kinda as if there were (mumblety) years of stories accumulating that I didn't even know had accumulated until you folks pulled the plug. Not getting much else done in real life right now as a consequence.

But hey, that's okay! This is too much fun! Got 30yrs of catching up to do! Keep up the inspiration!