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Dec 10, 2007 18:09

-just so i don't lose it:

We all loved once, said Hidan, laughing a little bitterly (uncharacteristic, Kakuzu wondered), and that is the exact fucking reason we don’t love anymore.

“Who did you love?” Kakuzu did not care, but he was curious. Hidan is fucked up and he knows it, the man who swears and raves while his head dangles from his neck ( Read more... )

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paraakeet December 11 2007, 00:38:10 UTC
Me likey so far

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lilydescend December 13 2007, 01:41:49 UTC
That was really interesting... ^_^
Although it felt a little... hm...unrefined, unpolished? (I hope it didn't sound rough ^_^' I didn't mean it to) Like a sketch, a ficbit, as you put it.

But I definitely like this: But now Hidan seemed weighed down by drudgery, the dullness and length of their tasks, Kakuzu’s reminders, fierce in his ear, their Leader’s vicious judgment. Hidan is still, pinned by a lack of blood, a lack of pain, a lack of noise. Love, love never crossed Kakuzu’s mind. *_*
And this: Kakuzu used to long to be touched. Hold me, he used to whisper to the unfamiliar darkness, he had not felt another human’s skin in decades. His hands were cold beneath his gloves. <3
And of course: the jagged gleam of Hidan’s eye <3. And much more :) Mm... your phrasing is just delicious sometimes *_* &hearts ( ... )

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starstruck2 December 14 2007, 19:52:34 UTC
Thank you!! ♥ A fucked up Hidan is indeed the very best kind! And I would love for someone to write a good, believable backstory for Hidan, which I found way too difficult, with a sort of love story in it-and of course, ending unhappily-I actually could imagine him killing the person he loved - out of jealousy, despair or just sheer madness... XD

This was actually the beginning of a draft of the Kaku/Hidan fic I'm writing based on your prompt! But I decided that I wanted to begin, at least, with a more narrative style, something more actively engaging. Also, I felt that I was repeating myself. But I didn't want to just delete it all so I put it up here, just in case :3

That song is gorgeous. I love the gloomy sound. Thank you! <33

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lilydescend December 16 2007, 19:17:49 UTC
This was actually the beginning of a draft of the Kaku/Hidan fic I'm writing based on your prompt! But I decided that I wanted to begin, at least, with a more narrative style, something more actively engaging.
Really?! *__* That makes it even more interesting! Oh, I CAN'T WAIT for this fic! *___* But I hope you'll put at least some fragments of this drabble in it because, as I said, they're just delicious :)
&hearts &hearts

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