Ohmiya: Without Words

[maiaide]

Ohno feels hands cupping his cheeks, sliding along his jaw and into his hair, fingers roughened by guitar strings and piano keys. They are gentle in their frenzy; they are concerned in the way they pull him and wrap around his shoulders. Always, when they are this close - sitting on the floor in a human knot with Nino crawled into his

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[aozora_pedaru]

Waaaaaaaaahhhh ... T______________T Ohno~!! You have great writing skills. This went right under my skin! I would love to read a continuation of this! Will Ohno be able to hear again? And what happened before? Ah would really love to read more of this! ^.^

[maiaide]

I know what happened in my head and I did leave a lot of stuff unexplained (so that I could continue if I wanted to). I was just trying to capture that shocked/chaotic/terrified feeling. Maybe I will write more for this.

[maiaide]

Thanks for the cheering~ :D After reading it over, I want to continue it. I left a lot of things untouched. There's a lot of potential. :) OTL! <3

[maiaide]

HAha... you don't think I shouldn't continue it but write more? LOL! I find that I have begun to start my fics with a lot of uncertainty. Tease the reader a bit and be like, "What? What's going on? I need to read more!" And then go back and fill in the blanks. That wasn't what I thought about when I started this but I might end up doing just that. X3

[zheinpathos]

what happened? D:

would love to see more of this! please! XD <333333

[nicefinalbeam]

There is nothing scarier than that. Seriously. When I was 12, I nearly chopped off my thumb, and after I passed out, I was having trouble hearing. Basically anything that was said to me was like the teacher from Charlie Brown. Because I hadn't passed out before, didn't know my hearing would be fine after I adjusted, I freaked out. I kept thinking "I need my ears.... I need my thumb... please don't let be deaf!"

The. Worst.

So I really felt the panic in this! It was beautifully written, thank you for sharing.

[maiaide]

Wow. Can I ask, how does chopping (or nearly) off your thumb and loosing your hearing connect? Or was it because you passed out? I've never experienced anything like that so I'm glad I was able to convey it well. :)

[nicefinalbeam]

Ah, it has to do with passing out. When you truly faint, or I guess at least when I do as it's happened more than once, it's like... it throws your equilibrium all off. You lose balance and fall over, sometimes you black out, and when you come to or are like... trying to wake yourself up, your hearing goes all fuzzy. You can't process the sounds and your breathing is heavy.

SCARY STUFF.

But yeah, I really liked how he was calm at first because of the shock and then realized something was wrong. Very cool concept. But of course I want Ohno to be okay! lol

[maiaide]

Mmm interesting. I will try and remember that if I ever faint (or write it). :3

Thanks for the comments. I got this idea and ran with it. I'm all about writing different stuff. I'm getting bored with fandom and need to contribute some new stuff. >_<

I want him to be okay too!