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Take Me In (2/?)

[anonymous]

"Goddamnit, Jim," Bones says without opening his eyes. "What."

Jim stays quiet because Jim who is normally Jim wouldn't. It's opposite day. Week. Something.

Bones groans and sits up in bed, rubbing his forehead. His hair is sticking up in the back, and as he climbs out of bed, Jim sees that he is wearing SpaceBrats boxers. There is a joke here somewhere. He smiles faintly.

Bones's eyes are suddenly wide and fixed on his face. "Fuck, kid. What'sa matter with you?"

Jim can hear the prompter inside his head: "Aw, c'mon Bones, keep up! This is our routine. I wake you up at fuck o'clock; you entertain me. Where're you hiding the good booze this week?"

When he ignores it, there's a sense of whatthefuckareyoudoing waiting in the wings, jumping up and down pointing at the prompter's words. Say them, it mouths frantically.

What the fuck is he doing

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[anonymous]

This was great. Really, really great. And, god, so me, as well. It was pretty strange to read it and go, "Oh, JIM, that's what I do. :(" but... in the good way.

This was just so good, and Bones <3.

I love it.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[kira_bouviea]

This was just so painful and beautiful to read. Annon, I bow to you. You are brilliant. And this hit entirely too close to home for me, so it's going to hold a special place in my heart. Thank you again annon.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[riviyan_questa]

That was fantastic! Especially the part where Jim is trying to talk to Bones, but he can't seem to actually say anything, and he's all frustrated cuz how is he supposed to make Bones understand? I know the exact feeling, and you captured it very well.

Also the choice at the end. <3 I'm glad he made the Bones choice.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[sangueuk]

This was very moving. I loved the tenderness in the shower scene and McCoy calling Kirk Casanova. Lovely writing, thank you.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[ilcocoabean]

Ohhhhh. ♥ This was wonderful. Yes it was and also:

That night he can't sleep. He feels oily and itchy in his skin, like he hasn't showered in days when in reality (reality) he's taken three discrete showers today, only one of them sonic.

His head is too quiet. His head is too loud. He has stepped out his body. He needs to get out of his body.

He has tunnel vision. He needs to remember that he has (list them) Bones, Spock, Uhura, his mom, Chekov, Sulu, Scotty, Pike, Gaila. People who care (they do, they do).

He can see too much. His life is mercury spilled on a porous surface; redredred, impossible to (re)capture, poisonous. He doesn't want it.

Yes, he does. (Doesn't he?)

That bit was the most beautiful because it feels so real.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[rubynye]

This is profound, eloquent, beautiful, and true.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[supasass]

This is so true. Every word is weighted perfectly. You know about the inarticulate-ness of depression, the profundity. The line about correlation and causation is gorgeous. Maths is emotion sometimes.
I'm hoping against hope you'll come out and post your name so I can find more of your writing. Pretty please?

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[secretsolitaire]

Painful and well done.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[elleipsis]

This is a brilliant take on this, and tactfully done. Thank you very much.

Re: Take Me In (4/4)

[badwolf36]

Beautiful and yet so painful. Really excellent take on depression. Thanks so much for sharing.