Fic: Changes For The Better (Mohinder, Mira, PG-13)

[squills]

Title: Changes For The Better
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Mohinder Suresh, Mira Shenoy
Words: 1900
Warnings: Angst and tension. References to an off-screen character death.
Spoilers: Through season 2.
Disclaimer: Not my characters, not writing this for profit.
A/N: This was written for the table I claimed at

Comments

[widestance75]

What he was before, he's come to realize, was not unhappy. *sigh* I'm in love with this sentence.

This was really great. It was interesting to see Mohinder deal with a real job and a naggy boss who also happens to be hitting on him and planning out his future. I could feel Mohinder's frustration and weariness. Mira has no idea what he's been through, doesn't understand his reasons for coming back.

Assuming that little grave is Molly's, how sad. Mohinder tried to run from the pain, it didn't work. But there is happiness in this: he knows he’ll be given an unconditional welcome, and that he’ll have someone who will give back to him instead of just taking.

Love love love this!

[squills]

*sigh* I'm in love with this sentence.Thank you! :0) That was one of the first things I wrote in this fic, and I liked it, too. I felt like even with the awful things that happened to Mohinder while he was in the US, he still felt alive - it's only when he leaves it all behind that he comes to feel numb and like he's wasting his time. The pain was bad, but at least there was happiness back there too

[widestance75]

Yeah, I'm still thinking about this one. Your fic is amazing because it allows for character development that just doesn't happen on the show. *wants a spinoff called Mohinder in India*

Another thing that got me - Mira accusing Mohinder of daydreaming. "I hate you, you bitch" indeed!

[violet_anchovy]

Oh my god! You killed Molly! You bastard! ;)

Whew--this certainly fits the prompt--even as Mohinder acknowledges that he's culpable in going along with it, the story feels suffused with such bitterness and resentment.

I'm a bit nervous about this, because we know so little about Mira that I feel like I'm creating an OC by writing about her

Yeah, it's hard--I think because Mira is such a minor character on the show, she ends up feeling a bit like a straw (wo)man here, written specifically to annoy Mohinder (although I don't think your characterization is out of line with what little we saw of her). When I first read this out of the blue, it felt like Mira-bashing--it's only after rereading your other un_love_you fics that I was able to put it in context and be more comfortable with it.

[squills]

This one was really difficult for me, but I've been fiddling with it for weeks and I'd reached a point where it kept staring at me from my unfinished files and I just wanted to get it posted. I think the biggest problem that I had was that at some level, Mohinder does realize he's just transferring his pain and anger onto Mira because she's the most obvious symbol of this change in his life that he's unhappy with. But then I ran into the problem of, if I had him vocalize that too much, then he ought to be aware enough of it that he could curb it and change his behavior...but then, it becomes a very different fic

[squills]

I'm glad you liked it! I did feel awkward about this one for several reasons, but...if I want to complete the table, at some point I have to write a fic where Mohinder hates someone...and I didn't feel like he has a reason to outright hate any of the female characters except possibly his ex, who we know in canon said things about his father's work that angered him. (Writing about him hating Sylar or Matt would be too easy, IMO, and I'm not about to create an OFC just for him to hate!)

Mira means well but she doesn't really understand him or how he works
That was what I was trying to do, without stating it outright. She's not really a bitch, but we know that Mohinder has some anger control issues, and he's just thinking awful things about her because she's an easy target. If I were to write a sequel, it would be about Mohinder realizing a few months down the road that he dealt with the situation very poorly and while Mira's behavior might have been irritating, he shouldn't have put all the blame on her.

[levitatethis]

I'm so glad I checked in on lj today and saw this posted. Interesting enough after sinemoras09's Mohinder/Mira piece I actually got down to write a story involving Mira (that I'll finally get around to posting in a few weeks

[squills]

This was really hard for me because I know nothing about Mira, but when I saw the prompt "I hate you, you bitch", I pretty much immediately felt the fic would have to involve her. There aren't any other female characters that I've felt he would develop that kind of animosity towards (and I realize I could have shown him hating a male character, but I felt like that would almost be too easy

[squills]

For a potentially girl!hating type of prompt that would normally make me cringe and not want to read at all, this absolutely a fantastic rendering of the prompt.Thank you! :0) Because the prompt included the word "bitch", I couldn't help but feel that it needed to be a female antagonist, and then Mira became the obvious choice, since we know that they've already quarreled over his father's work. And I've always felt that Mira still had feelings for him - there could be people out there who could offer a job to their ex and work platonically and effectively with them, but I have yet to meet any of them. (I can't blame people for not commenting, though; I had a hard time thinking of places to pimp this, and I figured a lot of people would look at the prompt and assume I'd written some kind of nasty catfighting breakup scene