A Country Cousin

[spritemuffin]

A Country Cousin
Pairing: Mercutio/Benvolio
Rating: PG14 (?)
Disclaimer: I don't own Romeo & Juliet (do I even need this?)
A/N: my first attempt at slashing the bard, wrote it after 3 months of rehersals the original text is mostly from memory, so don't fault me if it's a little off, the language didn't come out like I wanted and not beta-ed so the

Comments

[tessalonso]

Aw, bless Benvolio! I've always liked dear sweet gentle peace-loving Benvolio! And your Benvolio is lovely. :)

This was really different. I enjoyed it a lot. You have a really good ear for Shakespearean style dialogue!

(Was watching Of Mice and Men with my Year 10 class the other day and found myself wanting to slash George with Slim!)

[spritemuffin]

yeah, I got to play a female Benvolio and it inspired me to slash the heck out of him and Mercutio lol
I'm glad the language turn out alright
and you should embrace any slashing impulses you get from great literature lol

[pargoletta]

That was very engaging to read, with strong characterizations. I really felt the give and take of two vastly different personalities, but I also could see what attracted them to each other. At times, I felt that the degree of naivete that you give Benvolio is a little beyond the boy we see in the play -- who strikes me as a native of Verona, but the idea of him as a country cousin intrigues me -- but you pull it off well. And you do a creditable job with the thees and thous, too.

Just a minor factual bobble, though: In the time period in which this would be set, Verona wasn't all that major a city; Bologna was much bigger and more important. Bologna would have been (still is, in fact) "the big city," not a place that a "country cousin" would have been from.

[spritemuffin]

thanks for the criticism! it's always good to hear what you're doing wrong.

(as for the Bologna thing, I'm not gonna lie, I just googled a map of Italy and picked a city lol)

[pargoletta]

No worries. It just struck me, especially since I also mentioned Bologna in one of the stories that I wrote, in which Benvolio was given the gift of about three or four months of philosophy classes at the University of Bologna. I ended up doing some research on Bologna in the Renaissance, and I learned many interesting things about the city.

You've got a nice style; I do hope you plan to write a few more stories for this small fandom.

[spritemuffin]

right, research, that thing I usually do haha. I might write more, this one just came out after too many rehersals and then withdrawl when it was all over