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Fullmetal Alchemist (Hughes/Mustang)

Jul 13, 2007 05:36

Title: Redemption
Author: Jan toxictattoo
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 1323
Summary: Roy Mustang and Maes Hughes have an unspoken understanding.
A/N: Set pre-anime. For the springkink July Spring Kink Fest, prompt: July 13: #27. Fullmetal Alchemist, Hughes/Mustang: War, punishment, needing, love - "Break me and rebuild me."

( Redemption )

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Comments 8

eerian_sadow July 13 2007, 11:52:24 UTC

that was beautifully written, but the last line was incredibly sad. i actually teared up at it.

well done.

toxictattoo July 14 2007, 11:04:26 UTC

Thank you so much! This piece, once the idea solidified, came so quickly for me. Just as an FYI/TMI, this was my first time trying to write in present tense. It's a lot harder than it looks!

lady_ganesh July 14 2007, 01:23:55 UTC

Oh, how lovely and sad with that last line. Nice.

toxictattoo July 14 2007, 11:05:13 UTC

Thank you. I'm a firm believer in a nice wrap up ending that ties the whole piece together, if the fic is short enough. It came around really well, I thought.

lady_ganesh July 14 2007, 23:50:17 UTC

Completely agreed!

wk_recomend July 14 2007, 05:45:27 UTC

Oh, you are fantastic. Wonderful emotion in this and you point out the best details in a way that don't feel like you are shoving them in my face. Absolutely fantastic writing, I've loved everything of yours I've read.

And that last line just kills me. *clings to the both of them*

Thank you so much!

D

toxictattoo July 14 2007, 11:07:17 UTC

[blushes] Thank you! This was a prompt, I'll admit, that once I took it, I was wondering if I could pull it off. I'm a Mustang fan but have a hard time envisioning Hughes with him (due to the whole happily married angle). I almost gave it up but decided to stick through with it and see if I could write it.

Glad I did. I am particularly proud of this fic.

bunnysquee August 2 2007, 02:12:58 UTC

i love this pairing, but only if written well and in-character, and this was done perfectly - roy wallowing in despair and misery and maes managing to lift him up and give him hope.

good job - thank you for writing and sharing.