Chinese Five Spice

[sprawling_song]

Name: Chinese Five Spice
Fandom: Harry Potter
Genre: Femslash
Paring: Cho/Pansy, Cho/Fleur, Cho/Ginny, Cho/Hermione, Cho/Angelina, implied Cho/Cedric, implied Cho/Harry
Rating: PG-13
Summary: The five most significant romantic moments from Cho's time at Hogwarts.
Notes; The first piece of fanfiction I ever wrote. Of anything. It's quite similar to A

Comments

[holidayonice]

I like the first two sections a lot! Pansy's made me laugh, as did "experience lesbienne" and the comment on Madame Maxime not being stupid. I also like the change in tone that happens with Ginny's section, and Cho's uncertainty. I'm not so keen on the last two sections, though? Little things just seem off to me, like all the swearing, and the way the reader is directly addressed at the start of the last section. Before that I thought Cho was just musing to herself, so it seemed a bit awkward and strange. But for your first fic, it's pretty good!

[scyfane]

I think you did an extremely good job with this.
I don't particularly like Cho, as a character, but this fic is turning me around.
:)

Like holidayonice said, it's the little things that made a big difference with this.

[sprawling_song]

Thank you very much! I have sympathy for Cho, so I'm always glad when people start to see things from her prespective. I've written another fic all about her which I'm going to post in the next few days, so please check it out, it might make you turn around a little more :)