Swimming in Suwannee, for zelost_mind (Dean/OFC, adult)

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Title: Swimming in Suwannee
Author: regala_electra
Recipient: zelost_mind
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Dean/OFC
Summary: Dean's seventeen years old and finds himself falling for a swimmer who gives as good as he dishes out.
Author's Notes: As per the adult rating, there is sexual content and language. Word count is 11,160. Major thanks to my beta.

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Comments

[untitleddemo]

Ohhh! This is tender and funny and hot and I loved Beth. And then the ending! When he tells her she's amazing, my little heart! AWESOME.

[regala_electra]

Yay! Thank you so much for the feedback! The ending killed me to write and it was revised from a much more gloomier version but I was really happy with the final outcome and I'm delighted that you enjoyed the fic.

[twasadark]

Really well written!! I especially liked the insights into Dean's typically horny teenage boy mind, lol. Favorite lines:

What he’d give for a little dirty sweet talk whispered slow and thick, time sliding by syrupy and rich.

GREAT description!

“Look, you don’t have to worry about me fucking up your chances at jumping over shit or whatever you do.”

LOL - I can TOTALLY hear Dean saying this!

“Where do you think I’m going at this hour, Sam? When a dude likes a chick and wants to see her naked but doesn’t want his brother cockblocking him, he’s gotta go out so that he can get laid.”

LOL!!! Very funny!

Thanks for the enjoyable read!

[regala_electra]

Glad you enjoyed so much!

LOL I sometimes say that my mental state is pretty much Dean's except that I'm a girl. And I don't think about girls as Dean does. Heh.

[samescenes]

This is so awesome! You had me hooked right from the beginning, because GOD do I remember high school :)

Thanks for writing, it was brilliant.

[regala_electra]

Yay I'm glad the opener worked for you! I really wanted to write it as Dean's ultimate nightmare and really, what's scarier than high school?

Thank you for the feedback.

[vinylroad]

I just loved this so much. So hot and sweet and filled with the sort of melancholy that you imagine most teenage relationships are rife with, but with added natural angst of the Winchester clan lifestyle. I love it ALLLL. So fantastic. Jen is a very lucky girl :)

[regala_electra]

Hey lady. *hugs*

That is some wonderfully thoughtful feedback you've honored me with. Thank you.

sink or swim

[quirkies]

loved this! enjoyable ofc, i like how independent and in control she is, or tries to be. great cafeteria baner. fantastic look at dean navigating high school, and the uncertain waters of his not-relationship with beth. also, very, very hot. like woah.
and perfect ending. for dean, all roads lead back to sammy.

Re: sink or swim

[regala_electra]

Thank you for the feedback!

The ending was revised quite a bit, Sam wasn't at the end at all in the first draft but after discussing about how depressing the original ending was, I revised it with pretty much the same realization, for Dean, it's always about Sam.