Spike City Chapter 9

[spikesfool]

Okay. Sssheesh! I've been working on this for days, and it's time to let it go on its own. Fly little bird. There were going to be plot elements, serious development, and everything. But writing TEH SEX takes it out of me, so this chapter is pretty much without value except for Spikey's failure to carry out his half-baked plan, and get himself in

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[spikesfool]

Hi, sweetie!

[spikesfool]

I'm tickled that you're liking it. I was trying a differenct technique here, lots of run on sentences, hoping to give it all a rushed feeling, like the urgency of their passion for each other.

Spike's on the hook for sure, but he's still wiggling.

Sorry to lag on answering. I've put another chapter up today. The train is on track again!

oooxxxx

[jasonsnene]

I'm falling over dead with exhaustion, yet I couldn't not read this when I saw it posted! This was just...GUH. I know you've come to expect actual feedback from me, but really, how can you expect coherence after that? You can't!!!!

Two lines I really loved: The war over. Two shots fired. I burst out laughing at that one.

And this: Enough for a good view of the cobra-swaying hulk above him

That image is just perfection. I love how you make me see things in a way that I've never seen them before. The moment I read that I just was stunned by the rightness of it.

Ok, the brain has nothing else to give ya. It's basking in the hotness.

*squish*

[spikesfool]

*squishes you right back*

Feedback is such a funny thing. For me, it only takes a few words, so that I know there is someone there and they like what I'm doing. You are an absolute trooper to be leaving it when you're exhausted.

Hee. I'm glad you liked the war metaphor, and the two shots fired. Sometimes I make myself giggle.

Thank you, dear girl. Go rest now.

[greenstone_j]

Huh... There I was, just truddling along with my day and suddenly I thought of this story and how much I'ld like to see an update... and I turn the computer on and... Voila! Are you sending out mental 'I have updated' vibes, because, if so, well done. I always like to know when hot and heavy sex scenes are on my computer... and *Barry White voice* Oh yeah, baby. I too loved the 'Two shot fired' bit. Spangel is an all out war... and at least it's a pretty war *grin*

[spikesfool]

I think we must be mentally atuned! I had you in my mind when I was writing this chapter, hoping it would be good for you.

Spangel battling each other in a nice, big bed. It's an image that gives me the shivers. Hee. And led to the "two shots fired" line. I'm chuffed you liked it.

*big hugs*

[angelsiredspike]

Very hot! I can't wait to see how Spike gets them out of the danger they are in.

[spikesfool]

Yay! I always worry if I'm getting it right. Thank you, hon.