Draco/Hermione : Lily-Livered Lady

[ishibishispider]

Hup hooo! Inspired by the extraordinarily talented derryere who wrote me the world’s best Sirius/Bellatrix fic ever so I wrote a ficlet right back at her :D. I tried my hand at a different style: a bit grungier, a bit disjointed, a wee bit cruder. So! Don’t keel me if it didn’t really work :P

Title: Lily-Livered Lady
Length: 821 words
Fandom: Harry Potter

Comments

[tumbledstars]

Wow, amazing. I'm totally speechless. I even forgot how to spell speechless for a second. I think you did a great job with this new style. The only thing I thought maybe needed changing was you used 'fuck' too much. It took away from the power of the word kinda. BUT DARLING I LOVED IT ANYWAY! ♥ you are my sunshine! :DDDD

[ishibishispider]

Thanks so much darling ♥

There was a lot of swearing, but I thought it was appropriate since this was more of a stream-of-consciousness, whatever her mind spewed out from Hermione.

...I don't even know if that sentence made any sense :\

But yeah! I might have gone a wee bit overboard maybe xD.

You are myyyyy sunshine ♥

[vashka_kat]

Wow... this was a lovely drabble depicting Hermione's wartime confusion and angst. Don't often hear the 'voice' of the story- first person, present tense... Hard to do right, and it really only fits a certain mood. But I think you used it very, very well. Great job!

(I am slowly working through stories and authors now that I have a little free time!)

[ishibishispider]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, I must admit I was very apprehensive about this, as it's not my usual style. ♥

Have fun a-reading ;)

[britt_1975]

Wow!!! You made it seem so simple to say something that I've thought a million times:

And damn it, she is not made for war I can't help but think that this is a thought that goes through their minds quite often. They are little more then children, fighting a madman. Albeit with help...but still. So much is expected of them...and you know they've got to be questioning their own ability. That is...if all this were real...which it's not...and I know that. Really!!! I do!!!

This was amazing. I'm always stunned by how much emotion and drama you can pack into so few words!!

[ishibishispider]

Thank you so much! What a wonderful comment :D ♥

They're so young, they've got to have misgivings and though their youth gives them a naivety, it also gives them a more latent fear because they're never had to face something so huge before.

I'm always stunned by how much emotion and drama you can pack into so few words!!

This meant so much to me. Thank you! *huggles*

[ladyfiery47]

thank you for this, my dear. lord knows i needed a distraction from everything, i loved it. truly well-written. and hugs for the sentiments *hugs* they really made me feel a little better. : )

[ishibishispider]

Aw, darling! I'm glad to have made you a feel a little better in some way *hugs*

Thank you very much darling for taking the time to read ♥

[vanouria]

beautiful! i just love the length of your fics, i'm so impatient that it really takes an engaging author whose work i've read before for me to sit down and read a long, or even chaptered fic, but yours are perfect! they're conveniently short enough for me to read quickly, and yet convey so many emotions that they could be a snippet of a chaptered fic. :)

“I’m not looking to be redeemed, least of all by you.”

i especially love that line. lovely, really, the way you depict hermione's confusion and pride, and how ludicrous it is that draco of all people was her voice of reason, and yet she should have listened. *cries* how tragic! I LOVE DRACO/HERMIONE AND I LOVE YOU!

[ishibishispider]

beautiful! i just love the length of your fics, i'm so impatient that it really takes an engaging author whose work i've read before for me to sit down and read a long, or even chaptered fic, but yours are perfect! they're conveniently short enough for me to read quickly, and yet convey so many emotions that they could be a snippet of a chaptered fic. :)

Thank you so much dear, that meant the world to me ♥

i especially love that line. lovely, really, the way you depict hermione's confusion and pride, and how ludicrous it is that draco of all people was her voice of reason, and yet she should have listened. *cries* how tragic! I LOVE DRACO/HERMIONE AND I LOVE YOU!

That was my favourite line too! And my heart yearns for Hermione in this piece, if I do say so myself :P, because she's so helpless and confused and scared and we've all felt like that at some point in time :(

I LOVE YOU TOO! ♥ LOOOOONG LIVE D/HR!