Stargate SG-1 crossover fic: Debt of Blood Part 11

[speakr2customrs]

Here is Part 11 of my crossover between Stargate: SG-1 and the D&D PC game Neverwinter Nights - set in the same universe as ‘Tabula Avatar’. Previous parts were HERE. This is the second-last chapter, there is only an Epilogue to follow, and I’ve almost completed the Epilogue and I’ll be posting it probably Monday. 9,700 words, rating R.

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[ffutures]

“Oh, crap,” Jack groaned. “Carter will kill me.”

And that's the measure of Baal's failure, Jack's more worried about that than being tortured.

[speakr2customrs]

Once you've been tortured by a priestess of Loviatar nothing else can possibly be as bad. Except having to read Buffy Season 8 issue 35.

[basilio_the_cat]

The scene with Ba'al felt a lot like a parody or sarcasm-drowning or something like it. Since the rest of the chapter sounded normal I was a bit thrown off course by it. I know you sometimes write pieces like what I mentioned, but I didn't expect to see it mixed with normal (for lack of a better word) stuff.

Doesn't mean I'm going to drop any of your works :) I was surprised, is all.

[speakr2customrs]

The scene with Ba'al wasn't meant to be parody - I was taking my portrayal of Ba'al from the way he developed later in the show, for instance when he helped Sam and Jacob/Selmak save the galaxy from the Replicators, rather than the more two-dimensional way he was portrayed in his first appearance.

[basilio_the_cat]

Hmm... It wasn't that bad (or very bad at all) the second time around. I got a little of what you were trying to do the first time - even though the performance felt a little off - and your comment only proved that. But reading the whole scene again, I don't get that feeling anymore. .. It must have been a mix of surprised confusion and the very late hour at which I read this chapter.

I apologize if my wording ruffled any feathers. I had a difficult time (considering that I was 5min away from going to sleep) in finding the correct words to present that I was trying to say.

Quite good.

[anonymous]

Wonderful work, as always. I am quite looking forward to the epilogue. I do hope we will get some vignettes of Cierre on an SG team. I can't help but wonder how a meeting between Cierre and Vala would go...

M.

Re: Quite good.

[speakr2customrs]

Thank you! I've completed all the parts of the epilogue that directly relate to the plot and I'm busy writing a few vignettes to bring it up to a full chapter length.