Kid Things, Chapter Eight

[sowell]

So, the thing about Kid Things is this: it got really dark on me. When I first envisioned this story I imagined half cute kid, half wacky roadtrip hijinks, maybe some angst tossed in for fun. Apparently that is not to be. I keep trying to steer it in a slightly less depressing direction, but it's not going. The chapters just keep getting darker. So

Comments

[arabian]

Oh, this wasn't that terribly dark. I was expecting much worse from your warning. I think (hope) this was a perfect follow-up to what has happened, rather a hitting rock bottom, because he wasn't there in the last chapter. Logan isn't rock-bottom until he's at a loss for words and just physically expresses himself. He's a physical person. I mean it was telling that in chapter 8, he THOUGHT about kissing her and here he didn't think, he just did. Hopefully your muse agrees with me and this was the bottom of rock-bottom and there's no where but up from here.

As always, excellente, but you know I'm a fan of yours ... pretty much no matter what you write!

[sowell]

Logan isn't rock-bottom until he's at a loss for words and just physically expresses himself.

Word. That's how I feel, too. I'm glad it wasn't too dark for you. I really feel like he had to sink a little lower for Veronica's compassion for him to overcome her fear of him.

And thanks for the nice comment!

[arabian]

See, I'm not a fan of angst and I didn't think it was too dark. And ooh! I wrote a sex-in-an-alley fic once!!!

[sowell]

I was afraid it was getting too overwrought at times, but I'm glad it worked for you. I've never tried sex in an alley in real life, but if JD's wife doesn't mind lending him to me for an afternoon...

[andrielle]

This was really angsty and sooo good. I heart this story and this chapter was just wow! I absolutely loved it.

[sowell]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! This story has really taken a downward turn in tone since it started, but I'm glad it's working for you.

[nm973]

Oh, the angst is good. I really like how dark this is, because I think it's used really well to develop or show the relationship that Logan and Veronica have. In this story, their history is dark, so you can't skip that aspect. Plus, if it didn't look like things would pay off at least slightly with these two, then maybe it would be too much, but it's coming from both sides.

Still loving this!

[sowell]

Thanks for the feedback. I love dark stories that have an emotional payoff at the end. It's such a rollercoaster.

[bijal]

Okay. I read your warning and thought maybe you would be going down the path of Logan and drugs - again - and I would have followed you, sure, but it was a head-scratcher because I didn't think that's where we were going and there are only two chapters left so how could it all be resolved? I see now that I was wrong, and I'm glad, because the version in my head was darker (and made little sense) and I didn't want to see that played out. I like your version much better, despite how bleak it was for everyone.

I think I've made my feelings on angst pretty clear, and you definitely delivered. I love this fic so much.

He had somehow decided she was his own personal savior when they were seventeen years old, and she hadn’t been able to shake free of the bonds yet, no matter what she told herself. God, she didn’t want to be needed this much; she had nothing for him, but he never stopped trying to take it anyway.

Oh man, so dead on. That's them in a nutshell.

[sowell]

Ha! No, I wouldn't make Logan a drug addict. Probably never...but definitely not this close to the end. I always feel the need to go overboard with the warnings so people aren't all clutching their pearls when it does take a darker turn. Glad you liked. Two more chapters, eeeeeeeeeee!