Comments | soucieux: [06/06] Yakuza AU: Okaeri

soucieux

[06/06] Yakuza AU: Okaeri

Jan 30, 2008 13:51

title. Okaeri
pairing. akame (je)
rating. nc-17
summary. akanishi and kamenashi are yakuza who work together, who live together, who trust each other. kamenashi's been in kobe for two years, but now he's back.
author's note. yakuza au! the end!
word count. 02280

( And then Akanishi led him to the elevators and paid the liftman to step out (five thousand yen? ten thousand yen?) and as soon as the elevator doors closed behind them, Akanishi pressed Kamenashi against the polished wood wall and kissed him like he was trying to make up for two years of nothing. )

fic: yakuza au

Comments 37

tenshicaluvkame January 30 2008, 19:18:33 UTC

a perfect ending!!
i wonder if kame will ever get out of the yakuza though....

though i wouldnt mind more =)

Gambare!

tenshicaluvkame January 30 2008, 19:18:57 UTC

uwaahh... im first! YAY!

shirofukurou January 30 2008, 19:35:03 UTC

I CAN'T BELIEVE THIS IS OVER

I'M GOING TO FAINT NOW. BYE & THANKS

rainmakerslurve January 30 2008, 19:43:33 UTC

Ahhh an ending that didn't leave me scrabbling for more!

He uses a finger to trace what he wants to say on Akanishi's stomach, instead.
Cute. Big bad yakuza can't easily say these things, right? xD

I like how in the last section, you repeat the word "still" a lot. It gives us a sense of a good amount of time passing... and hearing them use the words "tadaima" and "okaeri" -- it makes it feel like this kind of living is forever. ♥

soucieux January 30 2008, 21:43:25 UTC

Right! :D

Dsdfafa. I think the number of times I've used "tadaima" and "okaeri" in my akame fics is embarrassingly high (read: more than once or twice), but I love them so so so much and I imagine Kame says them so so so adorably~

Thank you for the comment! ♥

gingifere January 30 2008, 19:49:15 UTC

This. This was just perfect. I love that you highlighted how Jin is no longer Akanishi to show how their relationship together and in the last scene there is this wonderful domestic feeling-like maybe in the future things won't be perfect (and knowing your love for angst this is probably very true!) but right now its good and they're happy.

I seriously loved this entire series and in a way I'm really going to miss it. ♥♥&hearts.

soucieux January 30 2008, 23:48:13 UTC

Thank you. ♥ I mean, you basically said everything that I hoped to convey with the last part, so Idk what to say besides thank you. ♥ THANK YOU.

pixisity January 30 2008, 21:30:37 UTC

<3333333333333333333

*sad that the thrilling ride is....(maybe?) over* *looks hopeful*

It's sad and sweet and oddly enough filling. The story ties up any loose ends (not that there were actually any) and is just so much love. *hearts* REC YO. *grins*