oh dear, i'm going to end up sounding like a petulant child but...i want more! i'm really enjoying this and i want it to keep going for, oh, say another hundred thousand words or so.
i like the way you've captured the dynamics between the characters both canon and original and i'm really liking getting to know the characters you've introduced.
(oh, there's possibly a typo that snuck through: He couldn't have stopped it, if he'd been there. it's near the start of the daniel pov section, referring to jack and sam. i think you meant "could have".)
Thank you! I can't promise anything near that long, but I can tell you that it's not finished. (And I didn't know if you found it or not, because I forgot to link between the two parts before you commented, but the second piece of this part is here, just in case you hadn't seen it.) And I'm glad the original characters work for you. It's always hard to bring original characters into any sort of established canon without making the whole thing terrible, so I'm glad it's not too bad.
And yeah, thanks for pointing out the error. It's fixed now.
Thoroughly liking this story. You've captured the almost *painful* interactions between Jack and Daniel. Those poor boys always struggle so much! :-)
The voices do seem to be spot on. I also quite like the ensemble of characters you've created. They seem to be an interesting group. I'm going to enjoy learning more about them.
Final thought, I'm pretty sure that Jack just *hates* the word "tasting" when it's applied to Daniel ... especially when it's not by *him*. ;-)
Re: Liking it!sorrelchestnutNovember 16 2006, 01:06:45 UTC
Thank you! I was worried that the OC's were taking over the story somewhat, but I'm glad that you're enjoying them. And yes, Jack would be happier if Daniel would use some other phrase.
Comments 4
i like the way you've captured the dynamics between the characters both canon and original and i'm really liking getting to know the characters you've introduced.
(oh, there's possibly a typo that snuck through: He couldn't have stopped it, if he'd been there. it's near the start of the daniel pov section, referring to jack and sam. i think you meant "could have".)
Reply
And yeah, thanks for pointing out the error. It's fixed now.
Reply
The voices do seem to be spot on. I also quite like the ensemble of characters you've created. They seem to be an interesting group. I'm going to enjoy learning more about them.
Final thought, I'm pretty sure that Jack just *hates* the word "tasting" when it's applied to Daniel ... especially when it's not by *him*. ;-)
Reply
Reply
Leave a comment