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sophiecussen

A New Day Pt10

Oct 29, 2015 11:13

You might want to get a cup of tea and a comfy seat for this part, it's rather long ( Read more... )

emma and jenny, jemma, hahe, hand aufs herz

Comments 9

lazerbug2006 October 29 2015, 22:37:12 UTC

Hopefully Emma will not marry Frank! Awesome update? I can't wait for more :)

partoetorno October 31 2015, 06:41:35 UTC

Just a short message for now , just to tell you that this chapter made me , If possible , fallen in love with Jemma once again .....

sophiecussen October 31 2015, 11:46:32 UTC

That's the nicest message anyone could give me. Thank you very much :-)

partoetorno October 31 2015, 12:32:12 UTC

and now the long one ( ... )

sophiecussen November 8 2015, 19:02:47 UTC

I'm so sorry in my delayed response to you.
Let me just say your comments flaw me! Such detail and time you've spent on it. I hope the story carries on entertaining you.

Thanks for your support. This is such a great place for sharing Jemma stories. :-)

ptcruz November 1 2015, 03:32:56 UTC

I agree with Kykky there was so much to love about this chap. I think the biggest thing for me was in that first part of Jenny trying to get Emma to listen to her, only to have Emma call the cops leaving Jenny thinking there was nothing left of 'her' Emma and just wanting to give up. Then when the blonde showed up at her office, confronting Jenny about her own relationship and the choices she made in it, really hits a nerve with Jenny. To me though, the most telling part of your story was at the end, when Emma tells her she's never let herself be happy and how she always ran away. That's where I can 'hear' Emma saying 'You had me & happiness, but you threw it away.' I think if Jenny had only told Emma where & why she was going away back then, Emma would have waited for her.

Great chap!! Waiting for more. :)

sophiecussen November 8 2015, 19:00:18 UTC

Thank you very much for your thoughtful comment, it means a lot. You can tell now from my writing that I'm learning from you eh?

One step forward and two steps back, that's how these guys work, right?

second attempt at this comment, password issues. cbwicchic November 3 2015, 18:03:18 UTC

I was thrilled with the longer chapter. I do have several thoughts and a question. First of all, I'll give my comments. The dialogue between Jenny and Emma is great! Its intelligent, in-depth for the story line and easy to follow. Its not "dumbed down" for the reader. I like that. Also, I think the scene where Emma calls the police, in my opinion was Emma's only chance to strike back a Jenny for breaking her heart. She knew it was crossing that line but Jenny crossed a line when she betrayed Emma's hard fought trust. Lastly, my question is, did the thing at the botanical gardens scene really happen in the show? It's a great scene anyway. Great chapter!!

Re: second attempt at this comment, password issues. sophiecussen November 8 2015, 18:57:47 UTC

Apologies at my very delayed response to your kind comment. Ask questions - ask loads, I really don't mind. You have to question the stories, it's what its all about.
No, the botanical scene didn't happen in HaHe, I've made it up completely.

I'm pleased to see you didn't think I was dumbing it down. I try to write as I understood Jemma, in my own voice.

I'm looking forward to reading your next chapter :-)