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teh_will in soong_brothers

fics again

Aug 13, 2011 09:53

For those about to rock who are bored, some more incomplete fic. 'Cuz that's what I'm good at. XP

Title: Forgotten SonsCharacters: Picard, Data, Androids, androids everywhere ( Read more... )

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eru_a September 9 2011, 15:20:14 UTC

Finally found time to read these WIPs and write some proper feedback. Well, I must say, of course I don't know what your expectations were or what exactly you had in mind, but I don't think there's anything wrong with them! Sure, the language could be polished a bit here and there, but content-wise I think they're both interesting and original and I look forward to seeing how they continue. :o ( ... )

teh_will October 4 2011, 09:06:11 UTC

Goodness! Why do I never see these until too late?

First off, thank you for the concrit, especially the second point on style. I hadn't realized I was doing that ^^ I really do appreciate you taking the time and effort to point such things out to me. Can't improve otherwise.

I didn't realize the conversation between future!Data and the other person was so distracting! It is supposed to be an unknown, one of a few hints I drop here and there so when part two comes up and it all comes to light the reader looks back and goes "oooh, I see" rather than "where the heck did that come from?" At least that's the goal. But I've never been good at pulling off such things, so.

Unfortunately I'm a little stuck on FS at the moment, strictly because of style! There are two general types of stories I find online. The first more or less reads like a script. The writer tells us what is going on with little to no glimpses inside the characters' heads. The story moves along but I don't care because I don't know what motivates the characters. The ( ... )

eru_a October 25 2011, 22:26:35 UTC

I love you in a totally creepy way too, so that shouldn't be a problem. ;o)

an unknown, one of a few hints I drop here and there
I guess in that case it would be best to make it a tiny bit less mysterious, to make the reader understand just enough to make them more curious.

Your fics fall happily into this middle ground which is why I love them so XD
THIS IS SERIOUSLY ONE OF THE AWESOMEST COMPLIMENTS I'VE EVER HAD. Thank you. I have exactly the same problem with almost all fic I read and as a beta reader it's something I have to explain over and over again. I work so hard to get that 1balance exactly right. I'm really glad people (i.e.: you) actually see that.

I don't know what's really going on in the canon casts' headsSo, why not? What's missing? Do you find it hard to imagine how they would respond to this experience? Do they lack a purpose in the story ( ... )