The first poem I've written in over a year

[son_of_earth]

I am open to any criticism on this one. I'd especially like some advice with the punctuation which was pretty much just an afterthought.

"Lonely Bough" by Dana Chisholm

Comments

[frankensplean]

ahoy! If you wants some basic punctuation thoughts, bearing in mind it's poetry and not an essay, i would be inclined to do the following:
comma after "apartment" in line 2; comma after "here" in line 7; and i would nix the comma in line 5.

.. and these not so much to be anal but just to suggest a breath is being taken! i punctuate poetry the way i would speak it, as a rule of thumb, although if you look at someone like e.e. cummings,
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