The Shameful Designs of Conscience

[sommeille]

SO, I FINALLY WROTE SOME FANFICTION. BITCHES. BUT DON'T WORRY, IT'S NOT IN CAPS-LOCK, WHICH IS CRUISE CONTROL FOR COOL, OR ANYTHING. I JUST FELT I REALLY NEEDED SOME WAY OF EMPHASISING THE GRAVITY OF THIS EVENT, THE FIRST OF ITS KIND IN MY CASE, AND THE CAPS-LOCK BUTTON HAPPENED TO BE, QUITE LITERALLY, AT HAND.

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[versipellis]

So, I am horribly tired and I've only seen one episode of this anime, but I'm commenting anyway, because I really liked the fic ^^ it had the random edge and the overblown-ness that I saw in the anime, I was really impressed how you managed to get the same kind of mood come across in text. It also made me smile quite a lot, I loved the image of Nozomu as a college revolutionary ^^

Just one thing - on the bits where Rin was communicating silently, I wasn't sure about your punctuation?

E.g.:

...and spit on the grave. " She continued by glancing at Kei, clearing her throat...

I think this should be

>...and spit on the grave," she continued by glancing at Kei, clearing her throat...

Does that make any sense?

But yeah. Overall, good read, very enjoyable! Write more fanfic :p

[versipellis]

... and that '>' in the quote shouldn't be there. *facepalm*

[sommeille]

That's okay, I have faith in your flawless grammar regardless. :D

Yay! Glad you liked it! *feels special* I definitely intend to write more, and for this fandom in particular. ^^