A Thin Line

[soleil_malia]

I wrote this just to write. Okay, Royai day may have had a hand, but I need something to do in my spare time. To get to greatness, you have to stroll through mediocre. I'll be grateful for any mistakes pointed out and tips.

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A Thin Line

The beginning was simple, it started out as only a physical relationship. Who cares if two people simply

Comments

[annepackrat]

Interesting character portraits! A few mistakes though:

How wrong was they.

You want "were" I believe.

Every woman wants to be a man last,

Er, are you saying Hawkeye wants to be a man?

[soleil_malia]

Thank you for the correction! Grammar never was my strong point. -bows to grammar checkers-

I guess I should have chosen a better word choice or phrase. Basically a saying I heard "Every guy wants to be a girls first time and every girl wants to be a guy last." Or women want to have a guy settle down. I guess I should edit it later to make it more coherant.

[live4him4eva]

Nice job, this actually made me realize something about myself, oddly enough.

[soleil_malia]

Really? That's quite surprising to hear.

[live4him4eva]

Yeah, it made me realize why I'm hurting so much from recent events.
It had to do with that being a man's last thing. -nods-

[soleil_malia]

Why reading fanfics is excellent therapy.

I'm pretty sure there's many more until one person decides you'll be his last.

Unless you're like me and scare them away or attract mentally unstable people

[water_citar]

That was a nice story. :)