Revised Chapter 1 of Stuck submitted for Feedback

[sokorralewis]

I'm in a revising phase with this story (there is only this chapter so far) so any feedback would be great. I've changed a few things from the original version, including the new female character. Kiana Roberts has been replaced with Helena Smith

Comments

[murdocsangel]

Lovely! I like Helena a lot hehe, and of course having Weir and McKay unable to be too far from each other is brilliant :)

[ladybeth]

I'm glad you like her. I think she fits in better then Kiana did.