hp fic: decay of your golden city (harry/hermione)

[angeldylan628]

Title: decay of your golden city
Character(s)/Pairing(s): Harry/Hermione
Word Count: 1,706
Rating: PG-13
Summary: She keeps getting happier and he keeps slipping into darkness, and there’s nothing she can do to stop it.
A/N: Written for the Impromptu (im)Prompt-a-thon over at crickets' LJ. The prompt was strangers.

Comments

[angeldylan628]

Oh wow. That is amazingly nice of you to say! I was afraid I was too over the top in Harry's melancholy, but I just can't buy into that "all is well" crap. He should have been allowed quite a few years to be fucked up and miserable and drowning his sorrows. And of course Hermione would notice, because she's omniscient for the most part when it comes to Harry.

And since I'm not really an H/Hr shipper, I'm glad this read as real to one. I was going to crosspost at some of their communities but then I chickened out and went to bed instead. hehe.

[missy_useless]

My prompt! Yay! I am looking forward to reading this. I don't have enough time now, but I promise I'll be back as soon as possible. So excited! :D

[missy_useless]

I am very sorry for being so late.

This blew me away. Wowowowow. I don't have words - I had to read it twice and I think I'm going to read it again as soon as I've written this comment because guh, you killed me. This is Harry/Hermione at its best. This is HP fic in general at its best. I am definitely adding this to my memories. It is so heartbreakingly painful and fucking perfect and just - wow. I cannot thank you enough for writing this, every section, every sentence, every word is so beautiful and outstanding and haunting.

She knows that this is her cue to check on him, but the sight feels so foreign to her now. She wonders if this is one of those times where Harry needed to figure things out on his own because only he would have the answers.

She's making excuses.

This! And the funerals. And Harry's drinking the weddings and the bird and - everything, everything, everything. Your Harry is perfect, and I am in love with your Hermione voice. I love this so much!

[angeldylan628]

I am so glad I could do justice to your prompt, because I have to admit writing Harry/Hermione scared me to death. I rarely read fic on them and I don't even really ship them, but I've always wanted to give writing them a go anyways, and I'm just so glad it worked and that you liked it! :)

Thank you so much for the feedback!

[angeldylan628]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

[golden_scarlett]

*oh* i agree with all the comments so far... gorgeous gorgeous fic :) I loved the angst of it, it's always rang true to me that Harry would have a little off-the-rails period after the war.

You describe them perfectly, just the way I think they would be together. I didn't mind the unhappy ending because that's just HHR isn't it. Destined to break our hearts ;_; .

This killed me “Please,” he begs, the tone changing completely. His nails dig into the flesh of her arm, not painfully but not comfortably either. He presses his lips to the side of her face and she inhales sharply.
So much went on in that little scene, even with so little words and in front of everyone.

So yeah - I loved it ♥ So excited to find a new great HHR writer, I hope you've written lots more -or you plan to! Thanks for the great read.

(ps- one line seems to have the end missing(beginning of the very last paragraph):
Tom owls Hermione late one night to tell her that Harry.....

[angeldylan628]

I do hope to write more Harry/Hermione. I'm a Harry/Luna shipper first and foremost, but I keep getting plot bunnies for H/Hr so we'll see if they pan out!

Fixed the ending to that line. Thank you so much for pointing that out! I hate when I trail off in a fic.

Thank you again for the feedback! I'm really glad that you enjoyed this fic! :)

[angeldylan628]

Wow. Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!