Comments | so_say_we_all: Fic: Past the Red Line Part 2

millari in so_say_we_all

Fic: Past the Red Line Part 2

Apr 01, 2007 11:23

Admiral Helena Cain addressed her small group of Resistance fighters in the tent with confident tones, but she herself was searching for doubt.

Her constant search for second thoughts, skepticism, troublemaking, had kept her one step ahead throughout her military career. It had kept her safe when most of the colleagues resented her for moving ( Read more... )

helena cain, resistance, galen tyrol, rated:pg-13, past the red line, sam anders, author:millari, new caprica

Comments 4

cerebel April 1 2007, 16:03:47 UTC

Awesome! This is a great Cain POV -- really gets inside her head. And the back and forth between Tyrol and Anders is totally believable. The only complaint I could have is that you might want to double-space between paragraphs, to make it easier to read, but that's not terribly crucial.

Keep writing, guys :D

millari April 1 2007, 16:17:27 UTC

Thanks! When we first agreed upon the canon for this community, I told myself I would probably never try to write Cain, because I never felt like I could identify with her POV, and then I suddenly found myself having to write her.
I guess the intimidation factor of writing her made me try harder.

Oh, and I went back and fixed the single-spacing problem.

ragazzaazzurra April 22 2007, 21:01:38 UTC

This was an excellent look inside both Cain's and Tyrol's head. Very good characterization of them, spot on in both cases. You know, reading this just makes me resent the fact that they killed off Cain more and more... Sigh...

millari April 22 2007, 23:38:31 UTC

Thanks very much. I hope you are liking the subsequent parts as well.