FIC: Pursuit, part 2

[snowisgreat]

Rule number 6: Let them know they have lost.

Once inside, I quickly lock the door and shove him up against it before I crush my lips against his. I’m not being gentle or tender, I am claiming my prize and I feel and hear our teeth clashing together. It’s not pretty but it’s sexy and I moan in content when I feel that he doesn’t try and resist. He

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[tia_maria_616]

Shit, that was good.
...

I'll come back with a comment when I find my brain, 'kay?

♥

[snowisgreat]

Fuck, that's nice to know =P

Okay hun, you do that *grins*

[tia_maria_616]

Okay, so I'm back.
I loved that he was so cocky, but he could afford to be, because he knew he'd get the boy in the end anyway.
And then I loved how the boy thought that he was the one in control because he was wanted, until eventually he caught on.
Plus, your smut is so very hot.
Finaly, I was totally happy with the end, that he didn't want to know his name, that he was happy to just have him once for his domination game, and then that was all he wanted. That was cool.
In general, this is just great, and I'm putting it in memories. ♥

[snowisgreat]

When I started writing I hadn't intended him to be such a cocky bastard at all but it just kinda happened and I like how he turned out :)

*sighs with relief* Thank you! That smut... gah. So damn hard to write!

Yeah, for a split-second I thought of making it a fluffy ending but then I came to my senses :D

Thank you so much for your comment sweetie! ♥

[mildly_neurotic]

This was very well writen and incredible erotic. In the end I understand why you left it as you did, it was appropraite to the story. But its just so empty. Ah well. Brilliant job.

[snowisgreat]

Thank you very much :) That whole scene in the toilet caused me some serious grief so to hear that it apparently works, makes me happy :D

How would you have liked to see it end? *is curious*

[mildly_neurotic]

I'm not sure it could end satifactorily. The main character is sort of a prick. Sorry hehe. If he suddenly fell for "the Kid" it would ring fake. So like I said the ending as is is approrpiate to the story you were telling. Still feels so hollow though. If that makes any sense?

[snowisgreat]

haha, yeah, he's a downright bastard :D
Yeah, it's like I said to tia_maria, that if he had actually allowed himself to fall for the kid then it would have been... wrong. I hate his personality but I loved writing him and he refused to go all soft so... I obeyed :D

I think I know what you mean, yes

[blueandbrady]

Well, if you are like that you've gotta have a rule of 'don't feel bad' or else you're screwed.

man, that guy we get the point of view from is pretty much the whole reason i don't date anymore. cause just because this is fiction doesn't mean those types of people don't exist. it's just sad.

the 'kid' was better off ignoring him. i would have just stopped coming to the club or told a bouncer he was stalking me or something. but i guess he was enjoying being pursued for so long.

i don't understand how people get off on that type of sex, so mean and rough, but i guess because it's not my kink. but it's sad when it's a stranger and degrading. i dunno. i feel sad for both the characters of the story.

also: i can't believe how long it's taken me to actually get to sit down and read something and comment. now that is sad. how long ago did you post this? geesh.

[snowisgreat]

He's a right bastard, I know. It was also a real challenge writing him because he is SO far from what I'm like myself so I had to really work to get inside his head.

I know there are people like him out there, fortunately I haven't run into anyone as bad as him myself - after all, there's a big difference between your average Casanova and this type of guy (or girl).
I don't hope you have had any experiences like this. That would be bad.

Yeah, the kid liked being pursued like that, he was flattered by it. He definitely hadn't counted on it to go like this. Poor boy. I feel sad for both of them as well.

Ar least you finally made it hun :D