Comments | snapeluver2000: Yay a story

snapeluver2000

Yay a story

Apr 04, 2007 03:56

Okay so while it's not done I wanted some feedback before I put too much time into this. I still have quite a ways to go. But here it is so far.

( Cigarettes and Chocolate Milk )

fanfic, slash, hp/ss

Comments 4

scelto April 5 2007, 01:35:35 UTC

"Would you like a lemon drop?”

That line cracked me up for some reason. It was random. Snape is silly. Ron is a girl.

csoninja April 14 2007, 04:56:39 UTC

good story but again need more. oh and the leaky couldron isn't in hogsmead... but the setting does work, maybe there is a way to make it diagon alley. oh the lemon drop line was perfect! i loved it, clasic dumbledore!

snapeluver2000 April 14 2007, 05:05:34 UTC

What is a bar in Hogsmeade then. I get so confused!

csoninja April 14 2007, 05:15:53 UTC

The three broomsticks is the one the students go to...the other pub is hogshead or something and that is the one that is dingy and dirty nasty.