Amara Lee (Sailor Earth) and the Ai Tenshi and Yume Tenshi Senshi

[smsues]

These characters also have profiles that go with them, which I have posted with the samples. I didn't include everything in the profiles in the entry... since this story already confuses the crap out of me.

Title: Yasashii Yoake
Writer: Ashleigh Kaiba and Bunny Aino
Canon: Anime and Sera Myu, Yugi-Oh, and a small sprinkling of elements from

Comments

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[anonymous]

I understand that you hate Sues, like everyone else, including myself, but I agree with the other commenter! You were way too rude to Ashleigh-Kaiba and Bunny Aino! They worked very hard on that fic, and didn't disobey FF.net's rules. They mentioned that you could send in OCs if you wanted to, but never posted an actual form in the fic, what WAS against the site's rules. The form was probably sent via e-mail. As for their OCs being Sues, yes, their OCs did have some Sue traits, but they were just having fun! And yes, some of the OCs probably were borderline Sues, but not as bad as some of the Usagi clones you see on FF.net! And just thought I'd let ya know, but if you check the link, it's no longer there on FF.net.

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[anonymous]

I personally hate OC's and Mary Sues/Stus, but I don't think you should really be putting authors down like that. Constructive criticism helps rather than hurts. You should gently let them know the weak points in their story without bashing them. They are trying to write and not everyone can put things down on paper (or Word) perfectly. As a criticizer, it's our job to help these people improve rather than discourage them from writing. Creativity is important nowadays and having good writing skills is important as well. You should consider apologizing to them and helping them out. They are open to concrit, believe it or not.

[ninjitsu_x]

Uh, yeah, what's your problem?

I heard that you were picking on a certain friend of mine-Bunny Aino? While constructive critisim is decent for any fic, you posting the fic is not only stupid, but childish. You need to do a little something called growing up. If you can't give decent criticism for a story, then don't do it at all.

You disgust me.

[ninjitsu_x]

Also, while I hate Marysues with a passion, I still respect the authors who write them. They have potential, however putting them down doesn't really help their self esteem. I have learned my lesson when I too was a harsh critique. Most of these writers just need a push in the right direction with their original characters. It's not in your place to bash them or make them feel bad. That's very low and childish, just as I have mentioned.

Bashing them doesn't really do your so-called crusade justice.