Comments | smoshluv: A Rainy Romance

smoshluv

A Rainy Romance

Aug 28, 2011 23:10

Sorry my songfic is so late, I just really wanted to write one for this song! I love it and whenever I listen to it this story plays through my head. I finally decided to write it down and share it with you guys(; Oh, and keep in mind, this is my first songfic, so I apologize for the newbishness(:

Title: A Rainy Romance
Song: Happy by NeverShoutNever
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Comments 14

purpleswag1 August 29 2011, 03:31:22 UTC

this was so cute <3 it was great! :)

smoshluv August 29 2011, 03:41:41 UTC

Thanks so much((:
<33

smoshslashbabe August 29 2011, 03:43:32 UTC

That's so cutee! I really enjoyed it(:

smoshluv August 29 2011, 03:53:35 UTC

Yayy(: I always love dancing in the rain and thought it'd be fun to go out in Irene. While out there I was inspired to make this :D and thank youuu, lots a luff<33

mutual_death August 29 2011, 03:59:15 UTC

I can see why you wanted to use that song. ;) It totally fits our boys. Such a good songfic!! <3

smoshluv August 29 2011, 04:17:14 UTC

Hehe Exactly how I feel, and thank you so much!! It's definitely not my best work, but it's good to see you guys like it(:
<33

boredomdelux August 29 2011, 16:27:14 UTC

aww, this was real good :) you had some lines in there that were really heart-warming and sincere, like
"I looked into those eyes, seeing the love and longing within them."
and
"His smile grew as he replied without hesitation, "I love you too, Ian," I leaned down and kissed him again, unable to help myself, feeling him smiling against my lips."

I noticed they were more frequent towards the end; it seemed like you got more into the story, and put more feeling into it. Keep that in mind the next time you write! :D The beginning was nice, the boys were in character and all, but it lacked that little something that you totally had at the end, if you know what I mean. The image of them lying out there together in the rain was absolutely adorable, though :D
Hope I didn't scare you off ( I am the con-crit biatch, after all XD), cause I'd love to see you write more and get even better :))

smoshluv August 29 2011, 16:36:20 UTC

Thank you, thank you, thank you!! No one EVER gives me con crit, but I wish they did. Obviously not everyone's going to think it's perfect. I wish everyone was honest ;) I do see that it has a slow start, I'll try to work on that. Thanks so much for your opinion on it all, and thanks for reading! <33