all these promises won't turn golden {tww - toby/cj}

[slybrunette]

Title: All These Promises Won't Turn Golden
Fandom: The West Wing
Characters/Pairings: Toby/CJ
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 781
Author's Note: For mini_miss at the small fandom and rare pairing drabblethon. First time with this fandom, forgive me for any mistakes.
Summary: Semi-AU. There is no time to stop and reflect and breathe in this city, where everything

Comments

[magisterequitum]

This is absolutely beautiful and wonderful. There are so many lines and sentences that I want to quote because they are just so well put together. It's a great story, but it's also constructed well.

The characterizations are also great.

First time for the fandom, very well done! I hope you write more and join further!

[slybrunette]

Thank you so much! I've definitely wanted to write in this fandom for a while now -- but never could quite get up the guts to do it. Hopefully, I won't let myself be deterred any longer.

I'm glad you enjoyed this!

[magisterequitum]

I know the same exact feeling about jumping into this fandom. But I'm so glad that you did and I can't wait to see more from you. It really is a fun fandom to write in.

:)

[slybrunette]

It definitely seems like it would be fun; I just got to find some ideas to run with, lol.

[slybrunette]

Yeah, I definitely wanted 'time' to be the general theme here, so it's nice to hear that it worked.

I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[krazykitkat]

Lovely.

[slybrunette]

Thank you! I'm so glad you thought so!

[shutterbug_12]

I really enjoyed the whole mood of this. So much sad memory and regret, and a little dash of quiet hope. I really liked that. I liked the third segment the best--very on pitch. Lovely. I don't usually like to read this sort of writing style, because I so often find it full of strings of sentences that are supposed to be clever, but aren't. But that didn't happen here. There were some nice poignant lines in here, and it covered the span of time well. Nice work.

(One little thing. I don't think you need a period for this sentence: ...and then it’s not like he can run for a third term and what are you going to do now?. I'd just take that out.)

Hope to see you turn out some more Wing stuff. =)

P.S. I've seen you around here and there. Mind if I friend?

[slybrunette]

Oh wow, thank you so much! I know this style can be overdone and used for the sake of covering up a lack of content so I'm so happy to hear that wasn't the case here.

(Thanks for the edit; this didn't get run through a beta, so there's definitely an error or two in there I'm sure.)

I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed this! I'll be friending you back btw; I'm a huge fan of your work!

[spyglass_]

Oh, this is really nice. Very powerful, and a fantastic job for the first time in the fandom. Hope you write more -- and soon :)

[slybrunette]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!