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[slybrunette]

Title: The Story Of A Girl
Fandom: Lost
Characters/Pairings: Mentions of many characters.
Word Count: 820
Rating: PG-13
Author's Note: I'm proud of this one. And I don't know why.
Summary: There is a baby, born in Iowa, and she becomes a girl, with bright blue eyes and light brown hair that turns blonde in the summer sun. And when she asks about her

Comments

[mrslinus17]

Woah, that really is good. you had me guessing all the way through!

[slybrunette]

Thanks! I like to keep people guessing :)

[bachlava]

I'm proud of this one. And I don't know why.

Because it is extremely good, and you've done a commendable job with the difficult task of keeping her perspective age-appropriate over the course of quite a long time, and doing it seamlessly. And been sympathetic but realistic about Jack's and Sawyer's problems, too. Superb work.

[slybrunette]

Aw, hun, thanks so much! *loves you*

I don't do kids, or teenagers very well, I struggle even with Alex, so this was a big challenge. I'm glad you thought I did a good job with it, that really means so much to me.

I'm thrilled you liked this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[tinkerbell99]

You should be very proud of this! I love the tone of the whole thing - how it's told in such a simple, but sad narrative about "this girl." And the fact that Sawyer gives her to Jack... Awww. Very, very good.

[slybrunette]

I'm really glad you liked this! I got this idea spur of the moment and just had to write it.

Thanks for reading hun!

[bebitched]

:o *goes back to reread*

Okay. That was AMAZING! I definitely was not expecting that. Was the woman that Clementine stays with for a week Kate? Would explain why she knew Sawyer wanted her.

There's something so emotional about how Sawyer gives her to Jack, how he trusts him THAT much.

Wow. Very nicely done.

[slybrunette]

And this is why I said I didn't know what I was thinking. Because this is SO not my norm.

No, it's not Kate. It's a random person. No connection, but way to read in between the lines.

Speaking of which, Sawyer giving her to Jack has two interpretations. And I bet you can figure out both of them ;)

Glad you liked this! Thanks for reading!

[eponine119]

This is so lovely and beautiful it kind of makes me want to cry. I love the way you've written it. It's just perfect for the story you're telling here.

It also, oddly enough, made me think of the relationship between Ben and Alex. Where the adoptive bond, though tested, is strong. As demonstrated here, with Jack and Clementine, in the last line.

[slybrunette]

Yeah, I kind of drew the Ben and Alex similarity here too actually, so it's neat that you picked up on it. It's very much similar to what I was trying to do here.

I'm thrilled that you liked this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!