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[slybrunette]

Title: Another White Dash (Part 1/4: West)
Fandom: Lost
Characters/Pairings: Claire, Jack, mentions of other characters.
Word Count: 1,218
Rating: PG-13
Author's Notes: Part two to be posted tonight, keep your eyes open for it.
Summary: AU, post island. Claire can't sleep for long. She never sleeps more than five hours a night. This morning it's only

Comments

[raisingirl99]

I'm glad you're posting the parts close together, because I'm very much looking forward to seeing what happens next.

I love the way you write Claire and Jack, as well as how you write their dynamic. I can completely see it being harder for Claire to talk to him after finding out that they're siblings. I also thought this was fascinating and made so much sense:

If he had his way though he’d apologize for every death, every mistake made, on that island, including the ones that weren’t even indirectly his fault. A part of her thinks it’s almost therapeutic for him, that he’s apologizing for other indiscretions, and so she lets him.

I also really liked this:

She hits the light switch and the bulbs over the sink snap on as she shields her eyes from the bright assault. After a few seconds her eyes adjust, and she looks into the mirror. It’s what she does in the morning, to remind herself of who she is, and where she is. That the island is now the past, and she survived everything it threw at her - at all of them. It’s a silly ritual

[slybrunette]

Well they're actually being posted together because part 4 has to do with NYE, so I wnated to do it on the day. So thank the calendar for that.

I really glad you like this though. I've had this part written for many months now so it's kind of a relief getting it out there. It really feels like it's been awhile since I've done much with either of them which is really kind of sad.

Thanks for reading/reviewing! I really appreciate it!

[slybrunette]

This, by the way, is how I used to write, a very, very long time ago. I miss it.

More on topic: I love the dynamic that they could have with Claire and Jack. I love that they're siblings. I want that storyline on the show but since they seem to have forgotten I sort of make do the only way I can. I fic. I did it a lot for awhile.

That said, this isn't going to be all Claire and Jack. Jack isn't even in the next part. It's Claire and...well you'll see.

I'm glad you liked this, sorry for the ramble, and thanks for reading!

[elliotsmelliot]

Well done! You caught my attention right away. Post-island stories are quickly becoming my favourite to read. I've always been interested in the survival aspect of the island and it seems off the island would be equally challenging. I think the Claire and Jack dynamic has a lot of potential to explore.

The important thing is that she has his number; she’ll find him again when she’s in the state of mind for trying to be his sister, trying to be his family or whatever he seems to want from her.

This is phrased really nicely.

A baby’s cry.

Ouch.

I see another part is already posted so I'm off to check it out.

[slybrunette]

I think it will be just as hard for them, if not more so, to be off the island. They're survivors of a big plane crash, presumed dead, except they're not, and think about all that's happened to them while they were there. What do you do with that? That's what makes me very curious about season four.

Anyways, I'm glad you liked this part! Thanks for reading/reviewing!

[bachlava]

This is such an interesting look into where Claire might find herself post-island (and where Aaron might be?). I can see her torn between needing support and needing her independence. It seems very true to form that she would want someplace secure for a new beginning while being utterly flummoxed as to where and how to find that. Same for the knowledge of her and Jack's relationship being more of a burden than anything else - friends can be less complicated than siblings sometimes, especially in circumstances like these.

Lovely work - I'm itching for the next part.

[slybrunette]

You'll get an answer to where Aaron is in the next part and more in-depth in later ones.

She is very torn. She needs someone but she also needs to move on. She needs her independence. She's got a few too many painful memories of the island.

I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for r/r-ing!

[hendercats]

Oooh, interesting start. The baby crying in her dreams and no Aaron in sight has grabbed my attention as much as Claire running away from Jack.

[slybrunette]

Well you'll definitely find out more about Aaron in part two, I can tell you that.

Glad you're liking it so far!