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[nightfallrising]

Title: Nothing Gold
Series: Blind Glory
Author: Nightfall
Disclaimer: characters property of Software Sculpters etc.
Warnings: pre-series AU, eventual shonen-ai
Notes: If I don't start posting this now...
The Blind Glory arc is archived here.

Feedback: would be really, really nice. I'm prouder of this one.

Nature's first green is gold; her

Comments

[archon_mentha]

Oooh, lovely beginning. The characterization of little Rezo is so fascinating - so very believable, it just rings true. The writing itself is very vivid - it works very well, draws the reader in. Great stuff!

[nightfallrising]

(glomps again--setting a record for frequency!)

I'm so glad you like it! See, this is why I keep saying Gutters is old and sucks, no matter how much I love the pairing. I can write better now, really. n,n;

My Rezo is a wonderful muse to have, but I'll restrain myself. His head's big enough. (g)

[dqbunny]

Very nice writing! I love the descriptions and it reminds me a bit of the style used in T.H. White's "The Once and Future King." You've done a really good job with this so far. I agree that the characterization of Rezo as a child is spot-on. I'm interested to see how the priest's bastard child plays into this story.

[nightfallrising]

Wow, thank you (is a big Arthurian sometimes)!

I love working with Rezo--we've barely seen him when he was really himself, but he still comes through. And then there's that pink teddy-bear...

The priest's bastard child will definitely have a part to play. :)

[momebie]

I am sadly, not familiar with the fandom yet. So I speak as an outsider. :)

I really like the description, and the care you take with the differences of the two populations. And the details about the portents especially. The boy intrigues me too, I'm hoping I'll get to know more about him.

[nightfallrising]

And I totally don't deserve to have enticed you here. You rock. :) And no worries about the familiarity; this is set a thousand years and more before the series starts. Everything's different, and the people who are in the series haven't had the things that shaped them happen yet. But I'm iconning with a drawing of the main characters so you can see what they look like. Well--if Rezo (red shirt) wasn't anime and had normal-person hair. n,n;

Thanks! The worldbuilding is one of the parts of this story I'm enjoying most--to the point, at times, when I wonder if the exposition needs to be chopped off at the knees. And then I go, nah. (g)

Whichever boy you mean, I think that can be arranged...

[momebie]

Che dear, if you're proud of it I want to see it. \~_~/

I meant the blind boy, but I'm sure the priests son has an intriguing story all his own that I'll love reading. And I know how you feel about exposition. My creative writing professor used to tell me he was going to stamp 'show not tell' across my forehead. But at the same time, I really like descriptions of new worlds. Sometimes the reader needs them. :)

[nightfallrising]

(purrs, steals your icon's glasses)

Oh, is that the tattoo you mentioned? ;)

[nightfallrising]

Thanks... and I hope to be able to stay more motivated with this one. n,n;

[siderealstrings]

Ha... ha... I read this, but I never commented anywhere, did I?

Infidelity was something that, he had heard rumored, happened to other people. Ha.

Your backstorying is excellent. It's so detailed that it's really almost not backstorying at all, it seems. I don't know. The city names and details... make me happy. ^_^ That's all I can think to say about them.

I am strangely fascinated by the bit about the red behind the eyes. The phrasing of it makes it so visual to me, which is probably good (right?), somewhat ironic, perhaps.

I don't really know what I'm saying. It's 2:20 a.m. and I'm usually asleep by now, but for some reason it's not working at the moment, so probably this comment isn't particularly sensical. At any rate, I look forward to future installments. ^_^