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[Fic] Sky on Fire: Slow Burn -- Chapter 15, Part II

Nov 18, 2011 19:01

Title: Slow Burn
Chapter: 15 Blind (Part II)
Author/Artist: Killaurey
Word Count: 8,262
Disclaimer: Naruto doesn't belong to me. It's Kishimoto's and I just play with it. AU immediately after the Sasuke Retrieval Arc. Part 15 of ? Unbeta'd.

( Chapter 15 -- Blind (Part II) )

sky on fire, slow burn

Comments 6

hungrytiger11 November 20 2011, 02:28:35 UTC

Fabulous cliffhanger. I am so excited to see what they are planning, and the plot is really thickening with the Konoha nins who are about to commit treason....

Also, can I mention what a treat it is to get two chapters from you on two great stories in one day? I'm so impressed by how much writing you got done and its all wonderful, as usual.

skylar_inari November 22 2011, 02:28:52 UTC

Mwahahaha. I had a lot of fun with this chapter, so I'm glad it works for you. As for what they're planning... you'll see. Same with the traitorous nin (though their's is the slower plotline).

Aww, thanks!

rushin_doll November 29 2011, 19:09:57 UTC

The thing that I think is the most brilliant in here structurally is the timers at the end of every section. They really help center and time-coordinate the story, which can be really hard to do when you're dealing with so many simultaneous little things. So well done on that!

And, as usual, I like the way we get to see the various teams and their motivations and approaches.

I also like the way you dealt with Ino's stress and trauma of being underground again, and how it's all working out without her just brushing off the nightmares.

You should do another chapter soon ;)
Ana

skylar_inari November 29 2011, 19:19:47 UTC

Hahaha, yeah. The timers came up pretty naturally when I was juggling how to escort ten teams through this exam. (Well, more. But the ten teams are the important ones.)

Also, it makes it easier for me because I... maybe have the rest of this examination written already, so I just need to sort through the pieces (I didn't write it in order) and paste them together.

Soon will come! Actually soonishly for real!

rushin_doll November 29 2011, 20:15:24 UTC

I think that writing the separate threads out and then figuring out how to make them fit together is a really good approach, and it works really well here.

So keep it up!
Ana

skylar_inari November 30 2011, 03:00:18 UTC

*salutes!*

Er. Well, I'll try. XD