Sky on Fire: Slow Burn - Chapter 14 (Part 2)

[skylar_inari]

Title: Slow Burn
Chapter: 14 Perspective (Part II)
Author/Artist: Killaurey
Word Count: 17,918
Disclaimer: Naruto doesn't belong to me. It's Kishimoto's and I just play with it. AU immediately after the Sasuke Retrieval Arc. Part 14 of ? Unbeta'd.

Comments

[hungrytiger11]

A creative exam! I'm working to keep all the characters straight simply because there are so many of them but they all come off as individuals and each team has different dynamics and goals. Very impressive. Can't wait to see who makes it through each exam.

[skylar_inari]

Yeaaaaaah. I struggled a lot with this chapter because of the number of new people I was introducing. They had to be introduced now or it wouldn't make sense later, but I normally try to... dribble the new characters in, one by one, instead of 'here, have twelve new characters all at once!'.

Hopefully future chapters will make them easier to keep straight as they all get more development and time in the story to grow!

I'm glad you liked the exam, though, and thanks so much for reading!

[rushin_doll]

So! Long chapter.

I think you know by now (and if you don't, you're about to), that I'm a huge sucker for parallelized narrative structure, so I pretty much love it. Each snippet felt just about the right length, and I thought you divided each team's progress into reasonable chunks (none too short, none too long) for rotating through.

I'm not missing something in thinking that all the POV characters are female, am I? That's not a bad thing, just interesting to me.

I do like the way that you manage to get a good sense of the POV characters' personalities, and the general structure/approaches of their teams through when you have so little time to focus on each one, so well-done there.

Umm... I think that's it from me. At least off the top of my head.

SOMETHING,
Ana

[skylar_inari]

Heeeee. <3 I thought of you while writing it when I realized it was going to be a v. v. parallelized chapter. The only way it really made sense was to break it down like this into 'head out - realize - break out' and since I had so many POVs that would have to go through the same thing it made sense to keep them on the same level.

XD; Not missing a thing. They're all girls. I like writing girls.

<3 I'm glad you think I managed that well! I knew that I thought they were defined but they're my creations, so it's hard to tell sometimes how it'll be viewed from other POVs.

<3 <3 <3

SILLY ANA.

[dyslogia]

I've been reading this for a while, and I realized I've never commented, so I just want to say that this is great! I really enjoy how you're exploring in such depth side characters and the character growth that must've happened during the timeskip. So: thanks, and I look forward to reading more. :D

[skylar_inari]

Awwww. Thank you so much! Sorry it took me a few days to reply back to you and I'm really glad you're liking my story! \o/