The Fine Line (1st Down)

[skyfang]

A/N: It has been a long time since I've really wrote something.

The Fine Line

First Down: Warning

"Yo Boya..." Hiruma stopped mid-step as he heard the nickname. Only one person called him that and she was one of the people he would rather not see.
"You..." He sneered, not even bothering to keep his annoyance in check. "The fuck are you doing

Comments

[bifacial_ler]

Oh, nice! )))
Hiruma's sister is precious. And Gran, well, she has to be the scariest person in the world if even Hiruma is afraid of her.
Mamo-nee, you are up for a challenge. ))

[bifacial_ler]

Btw, your layout is GORGEOUS. Where did you find it?..

[skyfang]

Thanks and whew... Good thing you like Megumi-nee

The layout? I found it in a LJ group. I can't remember the name though. I'm sorry.

[lampazo_libre]

That was fun!
I can smell some hilarious situations and Scary Old Matriarch (kinda start thinking about Grandma Suoh from Ouran here, but don't mind me, lol).
And why yes, the sister is great! Non-Marysue-ish OCs are rare nowadays.
I like your narrating style,also, clear, but no plain at the least)
Keep going, pls!

[skyfang]

hehehe! thank you. i'm glad you like Megumi-nee.

[wintaerland]

I like how Hiruma is so impatient with Megumi and how she's not the typical coddle-my-brother type of sister but more of the annoy-my-brother-to-death-even-as-I-look-out-for-him type of sister.

Grandma sounds scary, but I'm looking forward to seeing what she's like *imagines knees knocking*

[skyfang]

yeah I want my women strong. Hehehe. Thank you for commenting

[bar_ohki]

Ah, I'm not alone in writing anymore, yay!

Splendid start, I am eager to see what kind of mess Hiruma is about to pull Mamori into.

I think I'm going to love Hiruma's grandmother.

[skyfang]

yes! I'm happy that you are not alone anymore! heheheh!

thanks for commenting