Comments | skyfang: [Nov. 13] [Eyeshield21] Vulnerable

skyfang

[Nov. 13] [Eyeshield21] Vulnerable

Nov 12, 2008 11:59

Title: Vulnerable
Day/Theme: Nov. 13/ a sharp tongue, an Achilles' heel
Series: Eyeshield21
Characters/Paring: Hiruma, Mamori, Hirumamo
Rating: PG13

( to the story )

mamori, hirumamo, 31 days, hiruma

Comments 3

icyblu24 November 12 2008, 05:44:10 UTC

OMG! XD I love this one!

There are some grammar/tense contradictions that can easily be ignored over the absolute beauty of the style. XD MY grammar could use correcting ALL THE TIME, so I will never ding anyone over that. Please continue writing, because I live for these little pick me ups!

I wanted to be able to pick a line I loved most, but I'll just end up recopying the whole thing! XD

skyfang November 12 2008, 09:05:26 UTC

hahaha thanks for the review. sorry about the contradictions i typed this one during my break time. hahaha so no time for proof reading. thanks again

icyblu24 November 13 2008, 16:54:21 UTC

I tried to reply to your PM, but privacy settings would not allow me. You can email me at icyblu24@yahoo.com XD