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Just Wanna Touch You For A Minute (Kirk/Bones, Kirk/OFC, Kirk/OMC, Kirk/Gaila)

Jul 01, 2009 19:07

Title: Just Wanna Touch You For A Minute
Rating: NC-17
Pairings: Kirk/Bones, Kirk/OFC, past Kirk/OMC, and past Kirk/Gaila.
Word Count: 3067.
Disclaimer: Paramount owns Star Trek and Marvel and 20th Century Fox own the rights to the X-Men in their comic and film versions, respectively. Since I'm not any of the aforementioned companies, I don't own ( Read more... )

slash, kirk/bones, nc-17, star trek!

Comments 23

lizzie_marie_23 July 2 2009, 02:15:58 UTC

This was nice. I love how Kirk's powers deepened their relationship, instead of diminishing it. And the end was beautiful.

As far as proofreading goes, you switch tenses a bunch. Most of it helps the mood, but there's other parts that are confusing. Other than that, it's great

skips July 2 2009, 02:24:12 UTC

Thank you.

I had a feeling that was going to happen, I usually write in past tense, and I decided to change it up a little this time. Thank you for telling me.

lisamariedavis July 2 2009, 02:19:47 UTC

When I saw that prompt I hoped someone would fill it and you did an AMAZING job.

I loved this line - "Doctor McCoy, might I inquire as to why you are expressing unfounded anger at my door?" Spock asks startling McCoy.

skips July 2 2009, 02:28:28 UTC

Aw thank you.

I had to put it in there. I couldn't resist.

earthequality July 2 2009, 02:21:13 UTC

CAN'T READ IT AT THIS POINT IN TIME, BUT BASICALLY...

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS! <3

That is all.

:D

skips July 2 2009, 02:29:41 UTC

I EXPECT A MORE COHERENT RESPONSE WHEN YOU DO READ IT BB.

<3 E>

NOW IS THE TIME earthequality July 11 2009, 05:26:50 UTC

BRILLIANT! Stop ripping my heart out, bb.

I loved the show of Bones' drive and his need and understanding to cure Jim so he could touch anybody, but especially him. Oh yeah. Best motivator of all?

LURVE.

Just like my love for you! KEEP ROCKIN', KNOCKIN' THE BOOTS OFF THIS READER.

<3

kilala10 July 2 2009, 04:10:33 UTC

Jim can only be a virgin in fan fiction. XD

Uh, proof reading, just a couple weird sentences near the beginning-ish...-searches- crap I can't find where they are
sorry :(

skips July 2 2009, 05:37:51 UTC

I know. It's wonderful. XD

It's fine. At least you told me so I know where to look. :)

rip_the_tide July 2 2009, 05:07:19 UTC

Haha, that was so cute...especially the part where Jim's finally cured and they go haring off to the bedroom and Everyone knows it XDDD

Also, found this tiny typo: "meaning I can your command taken right from under you in less than a minute"

And, even though this is random, I remembered it from the movies, cause the part made me laugh. It was in the second movie where Bobby comes out to his parents and the mom blames the dad, then Bobby's friend says somthng like "actually it's the women who carry the gene" (which doesn't actually make sense in real life biology, but whatevs). yeah, just fyi, so Kirk would've had to get it from his mom...

That was random. Anyway, I really liked the fic, and the saran wrap and how mccoy was like, 'nooo we'll suffocate and die and that would defeat the purpooose' XDDD

skips July 2 2009, 05:42:49 UTC

XD Thanks.

And you so much for pointing out those problems. I wasn't sure which parent would carry it, so I picked his dad.

Thank you again. XD