Just a stylistic FYI--you've got three "throbs" or variants thereupon in a pretty close space, one per paragraph toward the end. It might be good to substitute another word; I was otherwise transported, but the same word in such proximity tossed me out briefly.
You have an excellent command of the balance between description and context; I never lose sense of what's happening, and that's a good portion of the eroticism.
(And yeah, whoops! Good catch, thank you. One of the artifacts of the way this was originally posted -- in chunks -- that I should've caught when I concatenated it back together.)
It's one of my favorite D/s kinks/dynamics to play with: the person who wants to submit precisely because they are so in control in the rest of their life.
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Just a stylistic FYI--you've got three "throbs" or variants thereupon in a pretty close space, one per paragraph toward the end. It might be good to substitute another word; I was otherwise transported, but the same word in such proximity tossed me out briefly.
You have an excellent command of the balance between description and context; I never lose sense of what's happening, and that's a good portion of the eroticism.
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(And yeah, whoops! Good catch, thank you. One of the artifacts of the way this was originally posted -- in chunks -- that I should've caught when I concatenated it back together.)
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God.
I can picture all the imagery so clearly in my head. Amazingly sexy and well written. <3
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Thank you so much!
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It's one of my favorite D/s kinks/dynamics to play with: the person who wants to submit precisely because they are so in control in the rest of their life.
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