Comments | sirius_loving: the lessons of childhood

atlantis_z13 in sirius_loving

the lessons of childhood

Nov 13, 2005 13:13

Title: Memories - the lessons of childhood, learned by heart

Author: atlantis_z13

Rating: PGish

Characters: Sirius, Regulus, parents

Summary/Challenge: #21, Sirius's childhood before he came to Hogwarts. Sirius learned many lessons as a child in the Black house. Some of them will haunt him his whole life.

Comments: This is a bit of a writing experiment for ( Read more... )

Comments 12

theenginedriver November 15 2005, 02:50:31 UTC

This is such a good bit of fic... I realize that I already said that, but it honestly is. Why didn't you ever write fanfic before? You are so good!

atlantis_z13 November 16 2005, 04:08:28 UTC

thank you! you're always so sweet. i dont know, but i am hooked now =) (if only i had time to write more!)

jedibix783 December 31 2005, 02:27:47 UTC

Dude, blanketsforts!!!!

embossedsilver November 16 2005, 02:22:57 UTC

That was wonderful.

she’ll love you more if he cries. She’ll love you more because he’s disappointing. Much later those same thoughts, flipped and switched and cutting, will come to haunt you.

That was by far my favorite part. I loved it.

atlantis_z13 November 16 2005, 04:08:52 UTC

thank you!

aillil November 17 2005, 14:14:17 UTC

Why doesn't this, too, have a ton of comments?!?

Because this was an utterly marvellous read. You depict the conditionality of love in the House of Black so incredibly well that I was there right next to Sirius. I could feel his elation, his desire to please and his horror at having disappointed.
Sirius' "Companionship" with Reg so reminded me of my own take on their relationship that, for a moment, I had the impression I was reading something that I'd written myself. Strange, isn't it? (Just for reference, no. 2 in this piece is about Reg.)
It's a miracle that Sirius isn't a lot more screwed up in his adult life, because parents like that are Teh Horror. :)

Most stunning and extremely well-written; thank so much for sharing. :)

atlantis_z13 November 17 2005, 21:36:48 UTC

omg! this comment has made me so warm and fuzzy and happy!! thank you for being so sweet!

i'm glad you liked it!

now i'm curious to read your stuff since you mention we have a similar take on reg...*runs off to read*

lyras November 30 2005, 21:58:28 UTC

I think it's the silence that I like best about this story. I know you have snippets of dialogue scattered about, but still there's a sense of silence and stillness that fits really well with the oppressive atmosphere of a Black childhood. I really like the Regulus section, and the allusion to the Prank is wonderful.

Noticed one tiny typo: But its not like disdain - you need an apostrophe in the "it's" here. But that doesn't change the fact that I loved this story - thank you!

atlantis_z13 December 4 2005, 19:52:18 UTC

thanks for catching the typo....runs off to fix

and i'm so happy you liked it! i'm glad the feeling of quiet got across!

mysid January 11 2006, 21:23:03 UTC

Amazing. I love your portrayal of the pervasive atmosphere of conditional love that was the Black household. I can see exactly how and why Sirius turned against them. And I love this:

"You will catch yourself year later in thoughts that they taught you. You’ll catch yourself half sneering. For some disdains, you won’t ever catch yourself. It’s hard to run away, to escape, to shake off the lessons their blood left coursing through your veins."

Yes, they left their mark in those aspects of Sirius's personality which make us all cringe just a bit: The boy who could send Snape into the Willow. The man who still says, "It was his own fault."

atlantis_z13 January 18 2006, 03:42:12 UTC

thank you!!!

and its so true. sirius makes us cringe. but if he was perfect we wouldnt love him as much.