The Private Eye - New Story

[siri2000]

The Private Eye

The Secret of Jack Twist

Chapter 1

The hackneyed ceiling fan groaned and squeaked, while carelessly swirling the warm stale air with each turn of the blades. Dust particles danced in midair as rays of sunlight penetrated through the partially opened Venetian blinds. The barely furnished, inadequately sized room contained a

Comments

The Private Eye Chapter 1

[bmshirts]

Interesting start. Somehow I believe L.D. had something to do with Jack's disappearance. And that he is involved in something criminal that Jack found out about.
Good writing.
Thanks. Carole

Re: The Private Eye Chapter 1

[siri2000]

Thank you Carole. I'm glad you liked it so far.
Siri

[mira986]

I like this... intriguing start to the story.

It's good to have you back, and you're back with a new story which is awesome. I'm already looking forward to more!

Mira

[siri2000]

Thanks so much, Mira for your kind words. I'm glad you like it so far.
Siri

[aileenfan]

Yay!!! New story!!! Great start, I'm looking forward to more of this:)

[siri2000]

Be sure that there will be MUCH more of this.
Thanks,
Siri

[ramona4jake]

So good to see you back with a new story !
I thought Ennis will decide to take the case when seeing the photo.... but maybe a black and white picture didn't get the magic ! ;o) So it had to be LD's threats - idjit !!
Thank you, cannot wait to see what's next !

[siri2000]

Ennis is a very cool guy, he's a detective! ;)
Thank you Ramona!
Siri

[taranryan_13]

Okay I'm in for the ride. What did LD do this time around to Jack.

Looking forward to chapter 2 to see what happens next.

Neyla

[siri2000]

Nice to see you here, Neyla. Be sure L.D has a certain role in this story...
Siri