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sinnatious

The Fifth Act, Chapter 33

Mar 28, 2010 19:43

Title: The Fifth Act

Rating: T for violence.

Summary: FFVII Time-travel. Gen. Cloud has an accident with a Time Materia.

Author's Note: We must be getting close to the end, because the average length of chapters is slowly creeping upward! Not such a bad cliffhanger this time, since you should see it coming. This chapter and the next one have ( Read more... )

act v, final fantasy, time travel, longfic, fanfiction

Comments 64

kaorismash March 28 2010, 09:53:47 UTC

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kaorismash March 28 2010, 10:35:59 UTC

Okay, in all coherency. Or well, more than previously.

The part I really really truuuuuly adore is YOU CAN PRETTY MUCH GUESS WITHOUT ME SAYING SO. *_* Butbut, oh i should start from the beginning.

I'm not sure if you did this on purpose, or if it's like this hte entire way through, but I was attempting to pay conscious attention for the second reread through. Kunsel's part's full of very short sentences, and it mimics his disorientation so nicely. Some parts required rereading over a few times before I stopped stumbling over it, but I'm pretty sure that's my lack of sleep talking. D: I really like how you labeled the wolves as "monsters" when they're the natural, unmodified (or are they) creatures. jasg ;_; The entire scene was very nice, I could imagine it clearly *_* and then ANGEAL. I may or may not have a tiny little bit of grudging... appreciation? for him. Though not a lot, given all the things we don't know about how he's spending all this time doing. :| So I won't comment on that just yet. LOVED CLOUD STREAKING TOWARDS ( ... )

sinnatious March 28 2010, 10:55:54 UTC

If you were mentally stumbling through Kunsel's bit, that's absolutely intended! It was originally really linear and coherent, but I went back and messed it up a lot with derailments and choppy sentences, you're so awesome at noticing stylistic things like that. *__* And not to worry, this should be the only POV part Kunsel has, and he only got it because he was the only available viewpoint.

Hee, Hojo is kind of fun to write in a sick and twisted sort of way. He's the kind of villain that's not so outright megalomaniacal as he just makes everyone uncomfortable. :3

-_-; Argh, you're right about the transition between the lab and then Zack. Spent aaaaages trying to fix that, and ideally that would have been a chapter break, but that would have just made this chapter really short and next chapter OMG long. Not really sure what else I could have put in there other than filler, though, asdflkjslfj.

XD I thought you might like ickle!Cloud. He's such a cutie. *__* Makes up for everything, right? :D Right?

demon_vampirate March 30 2010, 13:28:53 UTC

I AGREE SO HARD. WITH ALL OF THIS.

reighost March 28 2010, 10:23:36 UTC

OMG!!! I LOVE IT!!! LITTLECLOUDISADORABLEGHO:AHEOHNIGENGKDIEAUHRBT

reighost March 28 2010, 10:37:45 UTC

Ok now that i have most of the incoherent flailing out of the way... Zacks reaction to mini-cloud was priceless, and adorable and ... yeah... you know... and i can't WAIT for Sephiroth and Genesis's reactions! Waiting for this update was totally worth it, even though it felt like it was too short it was a great read!

sinnatious March 28 2010, 11:00:41 UTC

XD I deliver one of the longest chapter since the start and it's still too short! You guys are insatiable. ;)

reighost March 28 2010, 16:26:53 UTC

You have no idea how much we(your fans) crave this fic(shows how talented you are), i have so many mental images of Chibi!cloud and all the fun things you could have him do and the way other characters can interact with him.

*brainshutsdownforawhile*

*giggledroollaughsquee*

*blink*

"heh heh"

I'm just really REALLY looking forward to Seph's reaction to him, will Zack smuggle little cloud into the shinra building under a coat? XD And will Genesis have a seizure of his own when he meets the little guy >o<
Aeris can do the snuggling for all your fans!

skedaddle_san March 28 2010, 10:46:11 UTC

Hey guys, what's u--HFFHLARGHHHFLYJJKHJDBKLHSAKLDIODIFNDSJFH.

SEIZURES. EVERYWHERE.

skedaddle_san March 28 2010, 10:49:32 UTC

Oh, hey... I see there isn't an edit button. ;D

Incredible job in writing this up. *COUGHbiasCOUGH* ... *hides face in shame* The cuteness was overwhelming.

sinnatious March 28 2010, 11:02:07 UTC

Appropriate icon is appropriate. *_*

Nice to write something cute to offset all the dark dramatic bits lately.

anonymous March 28 2010, 13:01:22 UTC

Joining the AKDGOAENGIOEHGUOIAIDGIOADG party as well.

Hell Yeah, it's KUNSEL!!!!! He MADE IT! With Mini-Cloud and his fierce Chocobo!!!!! I thought it was Angeal that found him, but an Angeal-clone is close enough... Awww, it's watching over Cloud.

But AAAAHHHH what about the potential mako poisoning?! It makes me worry ever so much about Kunsel, too, getting to Midgar but completely out of it. He's not going to end up like that guy that lived in the pipes in the game, is he? But even with the disorientation, he's smart enough to at least notice the biological connection between Cloud and Shinra. Awesome.

And Zack managing to win Cloud over with their shared country-boy statuses, awwww. Some things won't change, eh?

sinnatious March 28 2010, 13:36:04 UTC

Angeal did indeed find him... then left a clone behind to take care of things.

Oh wow, random NPC in the pipes, second time playing through FFVII I felt so horrible for him - THAT COULD HAVE BEEN CLOUD. o__o

It could never change. <3 Doesn't matter which Cloud, country boys have to stick together.