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redqueenofevil June 30 2008, 08:46:27 UTC
Uh oh. Why does this remind me of books like Carrie and the like? What did the Storm kids do?

I can't wait for the next chapter. :)

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simfulacts June 30 2008, 15:58:43 UTC
:O I will admit a little of the 'Carrie' book's "style" of storytelling was an inspiration for me. Something leaning into the hybrid genre of fiction I was thinking would be fun to write.

Thanks for reading!

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cindyanne1 June 30 2008, 10:44:28 UTC
OMG... the suspense! What is going on with those Storm kids? And the mother? Yikes! She seems like a very VC Andrews-type mother, doesn't she? *cackles* But I love that!

I loved the transcript at the end. It was perfect, with all the little background noises typed in. I used to work in Claims, and spent some time in the Special Investigations and Fraud Unit... and we would have EUO's transcribed and they read pretty much just like that. Every noise was on there, typewritten, if it could be identified. Awesome!

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simfulacts June 30 2008, 15:59:35 UTC
Really? :D Sweet! I'm glad it came off so well. I did my best to convey how I imagined some spoken transcript might be kept. Something a little like a movie script.

Thanks for reading!

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cindyanne1 June 30 2008, 10:45:24 UTC
Oh and I had to add... is that the American High School from MTS2? I LOVE THAT LOT! *makes memo to self to download again*

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simfulacts June 30 2008, 15:59:41 UTC
It is! It makes my game lag like nobodies business but it's worth it for having such a nicely made and designed building. My building skills are crap.

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madame_ugly June 30 2008, 13:45:31 UTC
*wiggles in chair*

Ooh, suspense. I love it.

I'm getting a real Stepford Wive vibe from the mother. Did the father create her in the basement for his dastardly plans? Then he set her up to watch over the five "children", young sims who are not biologically his children, but will be raised by him (and the organization he works for) nonetheless.

This is wonderful. But I can't believe you call THIS a small diversion from your Pleasantview story. *snicker* If this were my story, I'd be obsessed with it.

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simfulacts June 30 2008, 16:02:09 UTC
O_O... You're idea intrigues me... I'll have to write something along those lines sometime. :P Darn plot bunnies!

I think of it as smaller because the cast is FAR more contained. I only have to visit usually two lots in playing where in Pleasantview every lot in the neighborhood is full and I have to play through them ALL to forward the story. Plus there's like 1001 characters to deal with in Pleasantiview. As fun as it is and as much as I enjoy it sometimes it overwhelms. :D

Plus, the last three times I went in there David Ottomas set himself on fire.

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madame_ugly June 30 2008, 16:11:31 UTC
*snicker* I tend to go off on plot tangents (ie make up wacky other plots for existing stories).

I'm also snickering at your fatalistic David Ottomas. NO, DAVID!! Don't do it!

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simfulacts June 30 2008, 18:24:19 UTC
Now THAT would life consuming! First you'd right an alternate universe to your major story and then an alternate universe to that and then an alternate to that until 50 years later you find yourself back at your original tale.

The thing that struck me about not-so-fire-friendly David was it would always happen after a fight with Tosha Go... She must be REALLY mean! :P

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telephonication July 1 2008, 01:59:11 UTC
Ohhhhman, this sounds so good. I can't wait to learn what the Storm kids did, and more about the mom.

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simfulacts July 1 2008, 03:13:39 UTC
Thanks a lot! :D

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