This is amazingly written :D I am REALLY looking forward to the next chapter, I love Arsenal in this as well :'D It's so well thought out and wonderfuul to read :) THANK YOU <3
I loved this chapter so much!! The way you explained his past and... just. GAH. You write beautifully, I can view all the scenes as if it was a movie. Great job!!
Also, Ryo, Yoko and the watermelon. It reminded me of an old photoshooting of them. =)
I'm definitely tracking your tag. I just need to figure out how to do it XD. I'm looking forward to the rest! <333333
Thanks for checking this out again :) The 8U PoP and trailer were filmed beautifully, so it sorta inspired me to try and describe each scene. Description has always been my weakness, so I'm trying to work on it.
Yeah, I intentionally added the watermelon part because of the shooting xD HAHA
I've posted a new chapter. CLICK HERE to be linked. At the end of it I have a new A/N that describes how to track a tag.
OMG!! Poor Ohkura. I liked how you've continued this universe, how Johnny was not originally part of the gang, why Gum is called Gum lol :P And I can see that Johnny is already falling for Ai. I especially loved your ending sentence, because it's the last thing Johnny sees before blacking out -that'll probably stay in his memory, Ai's flower <3
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I loved this chapter so much!! The way you explained his past and... just. GAH. You write beautifully, I can view all the scenes as if it was a movie. Great job!!
Also, Ryo, Yoko and the watermelon. It reminded me of an old photoshooting of them. =)
I'm definitely tracking your tag. I just need to figure out how to do it XD. I'm looking forward to the rest! <333333
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Yeah, I intentionally added the watermelon part because of the shooting xD HAHA
I've posted a new chapter. CLICK HERE to be linked. At the end of it I have a new A/N that describes how to track a tag.
Again, thanks for reading this :)
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I liked how you've continued this universe, how Johnny was not originally part of the gang, why Gum is called Gum lol :P
And I can see that Johnny is already falling for Ai. I especially loved your ending sentence, because it's the last thing Johnny sees before blacking out -that'll probably stay in his memory, Ai's flower <3
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Ai's a lovable character and I'm sorta regretting killing her off because she was so full of life.
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Thank you :)
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