I was a little apprehensive to continue reading this after 'Hands', which I thought was a little haltingly written. There was also some ungainly phrasing such as 'These things scale with height', which took me a few seconds to ascertain the meaning of. Since it's your opening paragraph, it might be worthwhile spending some time to make it a little more fluid. I would also encourage you to have a read through the whole piece again as there are some grammatical errors
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I was a little apprehensive to continue reading this after 'Hands', which I thought was a little haltingly written.
Oh, God. Yes. It was the first of them and I have to admit that I didn't go back over it. I've thrown it up into the air and let if fall down in a new (and hopefully better) order. Then I did it to all of them. Then I realised that I was obsessing and stopped. Now I need some sleep. I'm still monumentally dissatisfied but I going cross-eyed.
I would also encourage you to have a read through the whole piece again as there are some grammatical errors.
For all I've done with my life so far, I've never conquered the simple comma. I simply cannot do it. I'm comma blind *sob* Most of the time I just erase the little buggers.
I didn't know you could write; this is a nice surprise!Mostly I can't. I used to many moons and years ago, but I've spent so much time trying to make scientific nonsense sound relevant that I've lost whatever natural approach I used to have. I wouldn't have written this if I hadn't been sitting in
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Typos? Where?! Oh, why bother. I won't get around to correcting them anyway. I'm glad you liked it.
I've started a crack!meta!fic for the fun of it deeply inspired by the recent crack showing up at twop. I'm slightly hampered by my spoiler snobbishness but I think I've found a way around that.
And I'm looking forward to read your spoilerish thing btw - probably tomorrow whenever I've watched the episode.
Wow, this is a blast from the past. I'd almost forgotten I'd posted this here.
Thanks for reading. I wrote it mostly as an exercise in getting into a characters mindset (and also because I was bored and stuck at an airport) - hence the use of second person. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
If you don't mind my asking, how on Earth did you find your way here? I tend to have a somewhat anonymous existence in the fandom.
Partly, good karma-seeking (as a fellow-anonymous-existence person), partly, if I remember correctly, your author's note was rather like a red flag to a bull (it drives me absolutely BATTY when people put down their creative talents), and partly b/c you intrigued me by your various comments in various places.
To answer the starting point, I believe we have authors in common. I want to say Namaste and black_cigarette, but I may be mistaken in these. I know we are both linked to Queenzulu, so it may have been a comment there. In any case, one of your comments somewhere caught my curiosity, and, like House, I felt the need to indulge.
I do hope you write more as time allows - I quite enjoyed this!
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I was a little apprehensive to continue reading this after 'Hands', which I thought was a little haltingly written. There was also some ungainly phrasing such as 'These things scale with height', which took me a few seconds to ascertain the meaning of. Since it's your opening paragraph, it might be worthwhile spending some time to make it a little more fluid. I would also encourage you to have a read through the whole piece again as there are some grammatical errors ( ... )
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Oh, God. Yes. It was the first of them and I have to admit that I didn't go back over it. I've thrown it up into the air and let if fall down in a new (and hopefully better) order. Then I did it to all of them. Then I realised that I was obsessing and stopped. Now I need some sleep. I'm still monumentally dissatisfied but I going cross-eyed.
I would also encourage you to have a read through the whole piece again as there are some grammatical errors.
For all I've done with my life so far, I've never conquered the simple comma. I simply cannot do it. I'm comma blind *sob* Most of the time I just erase the little buggers.
I didn't know you could write; this is a nice surprise!Mostly I can't. I used to many moons and years ago, but I've spent so much time trying to make scientific nonsense sound relevant that I've lost whatever natural approach I used to have. I wouldn't have written this if I hadn't been sitting in ( ... )
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WOW. I did not expect that ending! I was guessing Cuddles and then Wilsie. You totally surprised me. One for my memories, absolutely.
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I've started a crack!meta!fic for the fun of it deeply inspired by the recent crack showing up at twop. I'm slightly hampered by my spoiler snobbishness but I think I've found a way around that.
And I'm looking forward to read your spoilerish thing btw - probably tomorrow whenever I've watched the episode.
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Beautifully done! Love the clinical musings combined w/droolish thoughts.... :-D
-Katrina
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Thanks for reading. I wrote it mostly as an exercise in getting into a characters mindset (and also because I was bored and stuck at an airport) - hence the use of second person. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
If you don't mind my asking, how on Earth did you find your way here? I tend to have a somewhat anonymous existence in the fandom.
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No, I don't mind at all! :-)
Partly, good karma-seeking (as a fellow-anonymous-existence person), partly, if I remember correctly, your author's note was rather like a red flag to a bull (it drives me absolutely BATTY when people put down their creative talents), and partly b/c you intrigued me by your various comments in various places.
To answer the starting point, I believe we have authors in common. I want to say Namaste and black_cigarette, but I may be mistaken in these. I know we are both linked to Queenzulu, so it may have been a comment there. In any case, one of your comments somewhere caught my curiosity, and, like House, I felt the need to indulge.
I do hope you write more as time allows - I quite enjoyed this!
-Katrina
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