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angelinajoli August 20 2005, 05:19:15 UTC
I'm so happy you've continued this series. I love the slave girl pov. Please post again soon.

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shrinetolust August 20 2005, 15:52:53 UTC
Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying the series. I'll try to make it not so long between chapters this time, but it depends how the muses go!

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angiepen August 20 2005, 07:43:28 UTC
I've always loved this series and I'm glad to see more of it. :)

I like how your slave girl is carefully guiding Paris -- just a bit, but just enough. And I like that Paris is perhaps edging a bit closer to having a good relationship with Andromache; she seems sympathetic to him and I don't think he'll be able to keep hating her for long, especially since he doesn't hate her for any reason personal to herself, but rather just because she's Hector's wife. That's a ridiculous, childish reason and seeing Paris overcome it will mark some good character development on his part, as well as giving him a valuable ally.

I also like the almost-sex between Paris and the slave girl. :) Very nice. I also wouldn't mind seeing a slavegirl sandwich eventually. ;)

Angie

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shrinetolust August 20 2005, 16:25:17 UTC
Thanks for your comments and sorry for the kerfuffle above. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and the slave girl's interaction. It's a more difficult balance than I originally envisioned, having an outside narrator that also interacts with the main characters.

I thought the whole thing with Paris and Andromache would be interesting...I didn't want to make it easy to dismiss Andromache from all of this, and I'm glad you're enjoying the interaction.

I'm happy you liked the almost-sex...hee. She may get some actual sex in the future, and possibly a slavegirl sandwich...heh...we'll have to see what the boys say about that. :P

Thanks for reading and for you comments.

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angiepen August 20 2005, 16:34:11 UTC
Actually, the use of a non-protag narrator is a fairly standard literary device. Not common these days, but not at all weird or borderline. The example most people get in English class is The Great Gatsby, where Gatsby's friend is the narrator and is watching the actual protag do protagish stuff. Stoker's Dracula also has a narrator from the side. So you're in good company ( ... )

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tinkerbell_may August 20 2005, 10:35:32 UTC
I have beenwaiting so very anxiously for an update. Wonderful story, yay! Paris is so sensual in everything he does, from a flip of a wrist to cuddling. And Hector is so reserved and abstemious. I love this story.

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shrinetolust August 22 2005, 04:12:20 UTC
I must confess to you that I had to look up the word "abstemious"...hee...see, we learn something new every day! And the word is perfect for Hector, definitely. And I'm so happy you find Paris sensual at every moment because that is what I aspire to--in a way it's difficult for him to be anything else...and he deals with every situation in a sexual manner. Which is perhaps not so healthy but it is fun to write...hee!

I'm glad you're enjoying the story! Thanks for reading and for your comments!

*pets your pretty icon*

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sildil August 20 2005, 10:44:46 UTC
Oh YES this chapter works! I love the viewpoint and the whole idea of the fic. Brilliant!

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shrinetolust August 22 2005, 04:13:46 UTC
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy it...I know an original character p.o.v. is a hard sell in fandom so I'm happy when it works for the reader!

Thanks for your comments! :)

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cohkka August 20 2005, 14:13:46 UTC
*writhes*

I love this series! Het, slash... hell woman, you write great sex!! *pants*

"Hello, my name is Cohkka and I'm a total nymphomaniac. The love of my life has broken my heart and yet everytime I look at him, I still want to crawl on his beautiful body and fuck his brains out."

Anyway... I love this series because it's like we're getting to watch our own fantasy. I feel like I am the servent girl and you describe her inner reactions so perfectly, I'm having them along with her.

I hope to get to watch Hector and Paris and our young lady again soon.

*flings self in cold shower*

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shrinetolust August 22 2005, 04:20:31 UTC
Thanks so much for your wonderful comments, though I'm sorry about the love of your life and will smite him if you wish...I know what that's like when you still want him despite everything...argh....

I must say I'm enjoying the hell out of the intertwining of het and slash, and I'm glad you few brave souls are willing to come along on the journey with me. :) These boys are soooo damn sexy and so much fun to play work with...

I love that you're there with the servant girl, 'cause that's what I hope for when I'm writing it.

Thanks for reading and for your lovely comments. *hands you towel for after shower* :P

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