how's my driving?

[shoutsgeronimo]

This is my first time playing The Doctor, and with such a long canon, it's a big task. Let me know what I need to know here. Thank you!

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[anonymous]

Howdy! I noticed someone on anoncomm bringing up that your intro is a little squashed together into big paragraphs, so it makes it a little difficult to read--and I admit it does make me go a little cross-eyed!

But I figure it's much easier to go to your HMD instead of complaining on an anoncomm, so I was going to suggest maybe breaking up action and dialogue a bit! Not a whole lot, but just enough to make it flow a little easier on the eyes.

But of course, besides that tiny bit of set-up crit? His voice is excellent and sounds just how he should! I can only apologize that I haven't hit his intro which... considering how many people replied, I'd say I might be doing a favor. XD

[shoutsgeronimo]

Hm I guess unfortunately that's just my writing style? [action text] in general goes against my writing sensibilities sadly, hahah, so I try to do it as I would write an actual paragraph, and since he's so wordy and whatnot I want to try and keep with the flow of his sentences. I'll keep it in mind for future posts, though, thanks for the note!

And feel free to tag me any time, I'm a little busy right now but I should be getting back to tags soon :')

[anonymous]

I understand! I actually don't find it very big a deal (after all I've read The Scarlet Letter HAVE YOU SEEN THE PARAGRAPHS IN THAT BOOK????) and while I admit it's not the usual I've seen, quite frankly there are people in the community who writes long paragraphs who I stalk like a madman.

but I'd much rather bring someone's criticisms to your attention that let it sit around somewhere you may or may not see it. I swear, randomly commenting on an almost-full post is no way to HMD people??? GEEZ.

And you're certainly right about The Doctor being wordy. He's got 9000+ years worth of talking practice, no? ;)

[shoutsgeronimo]

Ahh well I really appreciate you bringing it up on their behalf! Like I said, I'll try to keep in mind that the normal style is different in every game, hopefully future posts will be less difficult or easier to get used to as I get used to the journal-based system. I went back and tried to break it up as naturally as possible for him, hopefully this makes it more readable for you and our anoncomm friends.

If you don't mind, I'll leave the comments here unscreened in case the original commenter wants to see them.