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shortsweetsoul

merlin fic: shades

Feb 04, 2009 01:22

Title: Shades
Genre: Introspective drabble
Words: 423 (tiny tiny tiny!)
Summary: Merlin remembers his first day out of Ealdor.
Rating: G (pre-slash/destiny~vibes?)
Warnings: None; pre-series
Notes: Inspired by an entry on mammatus clouds in The Complete Idiot’s Guide to Weather. I wish I was joking.

( He could feel the potential for chaos and destruction sizzle behind his eyes, flecks of gold and blue slamming into the walls of his veins. )

all fanfic, fanfic: merlin, genre: pre-slash, fandom: merlin

Comments 17

itachitachi February 4 2009, 08:42:23 UTC

Oh...! This is so--I don't even know. Gorgeous. Touchable! Your descriptions are killer, and it all builds up to such a clear, soft end. I am ridiculously in love. Ridiculously so, because how did you pack something so loveable in such a tiny space?

shortsweetsoul February 4 2009, 20:32:51 UTC

That's so sweet! You just made my day. I was actually going for a more angsty ending when I started it, but the soft ending burst in out of nowhere.

Thanks so much!

justmyteacup February 4 2009, 10:16:32 UTC

beautiful!i could feel merlin's anger when he left. and i love that they can help each other just by being there. your descripstions are wonderful! i could almost feel the magic on my skin.

shortsweetsoul February 4 2009, 20:34:22 UTC

i could almost feel the magic on my skin.

Thanks for your kind words! :) I worked hard on that description especially.

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shortsweetsoul February 4 2009, 20:35:51 UTC

Oh, and I really liked how Hunith thinks the situation is unfair, she's such a great character.

Ahh, I love Hunith too! I really feel for her.

Thanks for your kind review! So sweet, really encouraging. :)

archaeologist_d February 4 2009, 11:52:27 UTC

That was great. Loved how the magic and the anger was so much like a storm and then he was able to make it go away. I would imagine he'd feel that way, having to leave.

Wonderful.

shortsweetsoul February 4 2009, 20:37:52 UTC

Thanks so much for reading! I'm really glad you liked it. :)

xel1980 February 4 2009, 13:35:35 UTC

Oh, awesome! I can perfectly feel Merlin's anger and the magic as something so real! <3

shortsweetsoul February 4 2009, 20:38:34 UTC

Heee, I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :D