Comments | short_takes: post-series, Mary Anne in the Middle

nybor4 in short_takes

post-series, Mary Anne in the Middle

May 20, 2006 17:28

So, I'm not 100% happy with this, and I apologize if anything is totally out of canon (they're grown up here, right?), but this is my first BSC fic, so I hope y'all like it!

Title: Mary Anne in the Middle
Author: nybor4
Summary: For thelastgoodname, who wanted a Mary Anne/Dawn/Kristy threesome with no angst and voyeurism. I don’t know how well I did with the ( Read more... )

pairing: kristy/mary anne, character: dawn schafer, pairing: threesome, character: mary anne spier, author: nybor4, !challenge entry, challenge: 03 - mary anne, written for: thelastgoodname, character: kristy thomas, pairing: dawn/mary anne, pairing: dawn/kristy

Comments 12

ion_bond May 20 2006, 22:09:10 UTC

“Fuck labels,” answers Kristy.

Oh, this is excellent. I haven't read a BSC book for years, but reading this, I find that I remember these guys, and you have them down. Poor Mary Anne -- I hope this doesn't end badly. (I'm sort of rooting for Kristy to dump Dawn for Mary Anne, but wow, would that be messy.)

Anyway. So much fun.

I don't know how you feel about nit-pickery from random strangers, but I noticed a few typos:

normalcy seemingly restore.

restored?

hours after kissing her best friends, who’s also a girl.

best friend?

nybor4 May 20 2006, 23:06:50 UTC

Thanks for the corrections! I don't mind them at all. You were absolutely right about both of them; I've been writing this on a family vacation, so I haven't had as much time to edit.

Thanks for reading! I appreciate the comment. :)

kiz May 21 2006, 01:07:30 UTC

Mary Anne would so end up at Yale.

I loved it! It was some of the best characterization I've seen in a BSC fic.

nybor4 May 21 2006, 03:06:12 UTC

Thanks for reading and commenting! I'm glad you liked it.

midnightwriting May 21 2006, 05:58:19 UTC

This is wonderful. I had no idea how this request was going to turn out, and I love it.

(Plus, I think it's helped me to realize what some of my problems with my Mary Anne voice are!)

nybor4 May 21 2006, 16:51:09 UTC

Thank you!

I realized after I said I would do this that the actual task of writing a realistic story involving a threesome would be a lot harder than I imagined. I was worried I spent too much time on backstory rather than the relationship between them, but I felt as though I had to. I really wanted to make it as believable as possible.

midnightwriting May 22 2006, 02:57:05 UTC

I liked the backstory. It's hard to fast forward from 8th grade to college without a lot of explanation, especially since we all have different versions of who they are as grown ups in our heads...

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nybor4 May 22 2006, 18:53:15 UTC

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

glitterberrys May 22 2006, 21:20:51 UTC

That. Was. Awesome. And I wasn't expecting it to be. Yay for nice surprises! (Nothing against your writing, just...BSC threesome? Wasn't sure ANYONE could pull it off.)

nybor4 May 23 2006, 05:05:29 UTC

You know, I figured if I were going to jump into the BSC fandom, I might as well dive in head first, right?

I'm glad you were pleasantly surprised- I'm not sure this actually counts as a threesome or more of a precursor to one, so perhaps I dodged the bullet. Sequel?

Thanks for the comment!

eengah May 24 2006, 02:36:05 UTC

Yes, sequel! (Wonderful, by the way.)